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Po-etchings To Ponder.

The scent of a crocus peeping
through an inch of April snow,
knees damp from genuflecting
to my Spring goddess.

The afterglow of a kiss,
as my heart races passion,
and my mind struggles
to grasp grateful words.

The coiled stretch of guitar strings
begging to be strummed,
as songs bloom from plucked chords
and flower the air.

The sharp tang of an ocean breeze,
its salty spray seasoning my flesh
the warm sun making my flesh toasty brown.

Each tragic fall of young soldiers in a distant land,
political fodder dessicated by false pretense.

The constant need to speak in ways
that dance gracefully
into the thoughts of others,
moving their souls to the rhythms penned.
 
Desire whispers from the blank page,
knowledge quivers in electrical synapses,
from brain cells to the hands
fumbling with the keys to free thought.

Poetry is the echo of my dreams,
its repetitive softness
highlights the depths of my need
to find hope in simple words.

 

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  • myrataal silver member
    January 1

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    Simply a breathtaking Bronze here, Artis!

    Ah, such wondrous lines, giving me quivers in electrical synapses.

    Thank you for your poetic showers of the past ... none can resist to become that Spring goddess when touched by your words.

    All the best for a glistening 2009.

    Love
    Myra

  • nsmurty
    January 1

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    There is poetry in the expression" The sharp tang of the ocean breeze, its salty spray seasoning my flesh" ... absolutely beautiful idea and expression.
    And the final words...
    Poetry is the echo of my dreams, its repetitive softness highlights the depths of my need to find hope in simple words...
    is really said in very simple words.
    Kudos


  • Truetome
    December 7, 2008

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    love this, eloquently stated here. the author states so many little stories into one. thoughts of death and life. beautiful and ultra creative. love,


  • poetryality silver member
    August 28, 2008

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    Love the title, the play on "poet/etchings", "genuflecting", great intellectual innuendo of simplicity (bended knees). LOL

    "as songs bloom from plucked chords
    and flower the air."


    Breathtaking!

    What a wonderfull sensual poetic journey you've shared. There could be no more reason to be called "poet" than this.

    Beautiful!

    I wish you well in the challenge.


    Much Love & Respect ♥

    Renee





  • nichtmich silver member
    August 1, 2008

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    Lovely lyrical explanation of your muse and it's desire to express itself through you. My favorite phrase is 'songs bloom from plucked chords and flower the air'. Exquisitely penned.


  • crazymomma
    August 1, 2008

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    The pic is very lovely but didn't seem to fit the poem to me. Other than that, this is just amazing. You definately are an awesome poet. The imagery in this was vivid and beautiful and the flow was very nice. Good luck in the contest.


    • artis
      August 5, 2008
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      stanza four details an ocean and its breezes, thus the picture covers one of the more lovely images of the poem, thanks for your comment....Artis

  • Durlon
    August 1, 2008

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    well done

    Flows nicely. Good rhythm. The imagery is quite good at getting the message across. I especially like: "The coiled stretch of guitar strings/ begging to be strummed." Like a poem developed in one's head, begging to be read.


  • Riamh
    August 1, 2008
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    You have the heart of a poet and make beautiful simple words powerful. well done! *applauds*


  • Porcelain Doll
    August 1, 2008

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    This is amazing. I have been having a great deal of trouble writing lately, but I think this poem might have been all the inspiration that I needed. You painted a beautiful picture, and brought your words to life. "and the songs bloom from plucked chords and flower the air"- That's absolutely beautiful. The imagery in this piece is wonderful, and you pieced it together perfectly. A beautiful write.
    ~Amy


  • ShaShay
    August 1, 2008

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    You may think your words are simple but they always seem to invoke thought of some kind. Your vocabulary lends itself in making moods come to life just by reading them after you pen them. Makes me wonder if you are able to read my mind from a distance. LOL
    Pen on fellow poet...~Poo~


  • rollingzen
    August 1, 2008
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    well done


  • Aussie Gypsy gold member
    August 1, 2008

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    Glorious, you captured what makes the poet in fine fashion, I love the images you painted on the page, Good Luck with this contest


  • Angelflower
    August 1, 2008

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    Beautifully crafted.. You always write such touching and wonderful words.. You create such vivid and soulful imagery.. I really loved this.. ow soft your words reach wandering hearts.. And hope, is always what makes us write.. We cannot help but search for it.. Bravo.. Wonderful write.. Best of luck in the contest..


    Angel


  • Cannonsfire
    August 1, 2008
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    Find hope in simple words...yep that's what we do


  • lianonsidhe silver member
    July 31, 2008

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    Really liked this!
    I loved the lines:
    'The contstant need to speak in ways
    that dance gracefully
    into the thoughts of others,'
    You've captured the essence of what poetry is all about. Magic!

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