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The Ice Cream Tongue 5000!

The creaminess so gentle,melted in her mouth.

 

 

"There's nothing like licking a soft serve masterpiece"  Said Lisa with a smile.

"Big DEAL, Who cares about what your tongue feals like when your licking. Said Joey (Fat Kid)

  Larry here and I have an invention"

Lisa's friend Rachel yelled back in disbelief  "Oh REALLY what is IT!"

"WELL it is the Ice Cream 5000! You put it on your tongue and it does the licking for you."

"It puts more in your mouth,10 times faster then you can!" Yelled Larry

The girls tried it and got a brain freeze and it didn't melt in there mouth.

Lisa said back "This doesn't even let you feel texture,and it makes it taste sour.

"You can never change how you feel when you lick and Ice Cream." 

 

 

Author notes

umm,i know how you said in your contest about spelling and puntuation,but i might have a few spelling problems. I'm a 10 year old girl.

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  • ten thousand cicadas gold member
    July 31, 2008

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    Superdeedooper, longlife! There's nothing yummier than icecream--a perfect balance of ice and cream. Ice for the cold, cream for the, well cream. Love it it. Nice job sweetie.

  • Judith Chandler
    July 31, 2008
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    That's interesting and I agree that nothing, no device, can replace the original feeling of ice cream. There's this great tension between savouring the taste and eating it fast enough so it doesn't melt.

    Nice write and thank you for entering. I didn't notice anything wrong with your punctuation and spelling either. Good for you.


  • Slick99
    July 31, 2008
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    cOoL

    cool longlife. good luck to you in the contest!
    -slick99