da'judge sid'da house, kids'n'truck were yurs
when ya'sid'ya'dun't love me n'more, hope ya'wer'surs
i seemed to'f run yur'truck into yur'house,
lef'a hole big nouf'fur anythin'wit'fo'legs includin'a'mose
da'kids seem't like jumpin'n'da'bed'f'yur'truck
it's amazin'ow fast lif'changes, how much't'can sud'n'ly suck
seems't me ya'canna'git'outta'yur'rut
would'a'ben'a'betta'fur'ya, if ya'da'kept yur'legs closed, ya'lil'slut
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I actually think that this was really creative - you've certainly completely colloquialised your language, which was very niftily done - can't admit I like the tone of the poem [the swearing / name calling at the end isn't my prefered type of reading] BUT it fit in with the contet, so - nice job!
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Interesting and creative write--good luck to you!
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