Vous tout êtes j'ai prévu.
[You're everything I expected]
I use to look in the mirror.
Wondering, am I still only a kid in bliss?
Or have I changed within a glance.
How much of the world did I really witness?
The streets still look the same.
My feet still walk in the same rhythm.
I am wondering, did I miss a step somewhere?
Or maybe, I'm just dancing to my own drum.
I find myself saying hello to strangers.
Greeting every face, with a smile so wide.
Was I always this quick to enjoy life?
Or maybe, someone changed everything inside.
The people still look the same.
My eyes recognize their laughs and humor.
Until, my heart stops at the sight of you.
Then I find myself asking questions once more.
Are you really here with me tonight?
Or is the vision in front of me a lie?
Maybe my eyes aren't the pair your looking for.
Or maybe, I actually am the right guy.
I would give you a dazzling speech right now.
Only if, you didn't take my breath away.
Somehow, you only laugh and brush my hand.
Well in that case, I only have one thing to say...
``You're everything I expected.``
[Vous tout êtes j'ai prévu]
Author notes
For that one special girl :]]
Don't be to hard on me, I'm new to this whole thing called love.
Enjoy.
[Thanks Kayla, for helping out with the finishing touches.]
A contest entry
- Snippets From A Laden Heart. by Poetryintheblood.
625 points, ended November 1, 2008, 15 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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"Maybe my eyes aren't the pair your looking for.
Or maybe, I actually am the right guy."
aww what a sweet, adorable write : ) congrats on the bronze for a heartfelt piece!
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C'est beau, elle est une fille chanceuse (:
J'aime comment vous avez employé le français, il est une langue très romantique.
J'aime votre rime, il coule & ; il carrys la poésie bien.
Bien cuit
X
[Written assuming you speak French, if you don't XD, translation is underneath]
This is beautiful, she's a lucky girl (:
I love how you used French, it's a very romantic language.
I love your rhyme, it flows & it carrys the poem nicely.
Well done
x
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Amazing
This is soo cute! Congrats
You both look really good for each other!
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Tres bien! This is very sweet You and your girl are very cute together. I'm glad the love is so great that it inspired you to write this! I love love! XD
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Well done. This is a very well conveyed piece. Great image to thought and solid rhyme and meter. I hope everything continues to be as wonderful as it appears to be.
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Wow absolutely AMAZING! You're like a rhyming genius, and the flow and imagery is so sweet and tender *sigh*. And you two are like the cutest couple!!! Congrats dude, love is a special gift to cherish!
♥ Kathraina
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Sweet lyrics, amazing flow.
Is it a love song -
Absolutely beautiful,man. I know exactly how you feel. Im glad that yo feel this way about her,shes a very lucky girl!!! The best of wishes to you and her! The overall structure and flow of this poem ws great as well. Keep it up my favorite part was this stanza.. "would give you a dazzling speech right now.
Only if, you didn't take my breath away.
Somehow, you only laugh and brush my hand.
Well in that case, I only have one thing to say..."
Awesome. Comment my latest! Its called "Clever she says"!
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I really like this--
it's raw emotion and simple--good work
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okay, wow.
It's so pure and sweet and really captures the smile love can put on your face.
There's really nothing much to say, it's amazing, can't find any thing that doesn't flow or could do with editing.
&the girl is lucky to get a poet like you.
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Thank you for your most beautifully spoken entry, Josie
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This was amazing.
I'm sure she'll love it.
You do have a way with words.
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Dang if this is your first love poem this is some really good stuff I'd LOVE for a guy to write something like this about me....this is a great way to express how you feel and although I don't know you or the person it was written for I felt as if the piece was talking to me which is a great feeling to have after reading a piece such as this my favorite parts " Are you really here with me tonight? Or is the vision in front of me a lie? Maybe my eyes aren't the pair your looking for. Or maybe, I actually am the right guy." although I LOVED all of it... AMAZING PIECE
always~Steph
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The sweetness, strong loving
the innocence of maturity strengthening
love is something I am so grateful that there
are such great ways to express it
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wow
for your first love poem this is relly good my favorite parts are lines 11-14
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Wonderful
Great write Charlee. You should show it to Brenda, she'll love it. You did a wonderful job at this poem Charlee. You should do more love poems for Brenda and actually show them to her (if you want).
Again, great write. Keep up the penning.
Kayla
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Wow!! This is awesome. For your first love poem this is awesome. I would love to have a poem like this written for me! Keep Up the good work!!!!
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AWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWW
I wish a guy would write this about me!! I commend you for your first love write. It was beautiful and chalked full of your true emotions!! I cannot wait for more reads just like this one!!
Warmest of love,
Mylee
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