The little screams are sweet, she loves to hear them... they fill her with joy
To hear him scream through out the charcoal night... Their laughter rings
throughout the graveyard... their joy in being near
has raised their open coffins and hopes with for change...
Their childlike play and conversation bring
them understanding, and the future spread
before them beckons... Their undead love is born again...
Burning brightly in their undead eyes...
They love the night, that fill others with fear...
their smiles are dark... and filled with mites...
All future time is now, and when they wed,
the world will know it's end draws near...
Together they are free, and two as one
embark upon a life that's just begun.
And it all started with a single shot of a gun....
Author notes
Ask no questions please.... this is for a contest.... I redid a poem call "Laughter and Love". Angry bunnies take no prisoners! I know it creepy... but I dont care!!!! 
Here's the original one:
Laughter and Love (sonnet)
The little tune is sweet, she loves to hear
him play his silly pipe. Their laughter rings
throughout the house, their joy in being near
has raised their open hearts and hopes with wings.
Their childlike play and conversation bring
them understanding, and the future spread
before them beckons. Love that's born in spring
can see the summer burgeoning ahead.
They love in trust, all ceremony's fled -
their smiles are ready, every chance a jest.
All future time is now, and when they wed,
the world will know as they do, they are blessed.
Together they are free, and two as one
embark upon a life that's just begun.
A contest entry
- Twisted Love by Darkwell.
550 points, ended August 12, 2008, 5 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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The contest has ended and we (Dark and I) are now judging. Best of luck and thanks so much for entering.
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First of all, thanks for adding the information in the author notes.
As for the poem itself...
Wow, you really did a great job at turning, "Laughter and Love" into something dark and twisted, while using the same format of the original poem. It's like as the couple in "Laughter and Love" are embarking their love, somewhere else, somewhere far, far away, the couple in your poem is embracing theirs. Even though, one is scary and one is not, they're both loves. Nice! Your poem reminds me of a girl who died, but was reborn again, either as a vampire or zombie, not sure about that, and the only way the man who loves her can be with her, is if he kills himself and becomes whatever she is, also. Very romantically twisted love that you captured here. Nicely done!
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Very creative twist to love here that really read well.
Their childlike play and conversation bring
them understanding, and the future spread
before them beckons... Their undead love is born again...
that was just totally a vivid use of words that rolled beautifully
I wanna see the other poem below it an I dont promise not to harass you but i dont think i will,.... for now
WTG! Good luck in the contest -
Dark and I can't judge the contest until you post a copy of the poem. I'm sorry. But, from what I read so far, it sounds pretty good. You really conveyed a twisted love here. Which is part of what this contest is about. For some reason, I thought you were talking about vampires until I read the title. Maybe it's a love between a vampire and a zombie. Now, that is twisted love. Haha! Just add the a copy of the poem and you're done. We won't harass you anymore until the contest is over. We pormise. Well, at least, I promise.
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Nice sis! I really like the last three lines. Nice author notes too, lolz. Great write, a bit creepyish, but still great ^^.
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