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The Ultimate End



I am the child, that never grew up
lost... in the grand sum total
of all I have ever seen
and all I have felt
my many acts
my deeds

One of four billion wandering souls
placed on a irrevocable path
moving farther along
each step known
by my God
or me

I am the dreamer that flew too high
the believer that fell... so far
a man that never knew
how... I may sin
or may fail
or win

A father,  a husband,  a lost lover
raising some with me higher
leaving others, behind
loving completely
sharing joy
dying

A collector of art,  and pretty words
the creator of my many dreams
a sailor...  upon the sea
endless observer
of sunsets
sunrise

The boy,  that watched too many die
that cried, when you bled away
the man that ate my anger
the one that returned
lost in my sleep
weeping

I am your greatest friend or enemy
yet I forgive you, every stripe
made on my aching soul
knowing inside me
I offended you
as well

The wander, that reaches for the truth
the poet seeking,  endless love
afraid daily, to die alone
loving the beauty
of a woman
always

I am the child, that never grew up
lost... in the grand sum total
of all I have ever seen
and all I have felt
my many acts
my deeds

A common man
writing my way, to the ultimate end

 

 

 

Lee

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  • Melissa Gayle gold member
    January 31

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    I actually really like this - though I have to be honest, I don't care for the layout or the "I am" repetition -

    but those aside, this is insightful


    • Endeavor gold member
      January 31
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      Hi Gayle

      Thank you for your thoughts
      I don`t care for reppetive eather
      I used it in 4 of 9 stanzas with intent

      Rick


  • Bella-lee
    October 30, 2008

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    Rick... there is no one I admire more than you once everyone has pencil and paper in hand... you are not just a big brother, you are my pen-to-ink her


    • Endeavor gold member
      October 30, 2008
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      Hi Kathy


      So nice to have my sister on here
      Love your kind words to me
      Pleased you liked my thoughts here

      Rick


  • SandraMVeinot
    August 16, 2008

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    filled with a soul of love...endless as a sea, mounting wings that unite the breeze into eternal passage of time...(believing into tomorrow)...


  • Jalalbad gold member
    August 13, 2008
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    a write I can relate to
    I don't wanna grow up, may we forever stay peter pans

    • Endeavor gold member
      August 13, 2008
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      Hi Judy


      Pleased you can relate

      Thank you

      Love the Smilies, Rick


  • ravensgift
    August 12, 2008
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    WhooHooo! Good luck in the contest. This was maaaahvelous!


    • Endeavor gold member
      August 13, 2008
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      Hi ravensgift


      Thank you for your well wishes
      Marvalous id good

      Thank you for the three bunnies
      Rick


  • trista gold member
    August 11, 2008

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    Hi Rick,

    Wow...I hardly know where to begin...I guess just with what a fantastic job you've done with this poem...and also with looking both inside and outside of yourself, to see who you are, in a soul-searching effort to describe yourself. That is a mighty big task, because I believe you to be all you've described and more...a complex man with a straight-forward heart...

    I have loved...over the last two years...getting to know the many layers of Richard McCarthy...But...I think Joyce really said it all, and I can't dream to compete with her beautiful summary of the man so many love, so I won't even try.

    Just remember even in the roughest of times, how many friends you have who would do anything they could for you...and that is because we feel that same care from you, day after day.

    Much love always,
    ~J.
    P.S. did you maybe want "wanderer" instead of "wander" in S8 ?


    • Endeavor gold member
      August 12, 2008
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      Hi My Friend


      I always save your comments for last
      I have to think on them at great leinght
      You are kind to remind me of my good friends
      Some of the poeople here mean so much to me now

      This was hard for me
      espacally because I have been critized for my ego
      In my mind, I try to have humility and write as such
      yet I also feel I have accomplished enough with my life
      I have earned some right, to have a reasonable sence of self worth
      This mostly comes from thoes that have avoided change and chalanges

      If I could save the world I would
      I learned relucantly, I can only aid and assist
      I hope my words are moderate and follow within my own truth

      I do love what Joyce wrote to me
      it is more a reflection of how she is than myself

      Thank you for liking what i wrote here
      Love you, Rick


  • SummerlandRayne gold member
    August 11, 2008

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    Wonderful YOU!

    A self portrait in verse...how befitting a poet! Loved reading the depths of my dear friend!


    Sue

    • Endeavor gold member
      August 12, 2008
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      Hi Sue

      Thank you for the sweet comment

      Pleased you liked it

      Rick


  • Slicks78
    August 9, 2008

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    Wow

    Wow.. I loved this. Every word, every achingly beautiful image. It felt so personal to you, yet I could also find myself in it.

    I am the dreamer, that flew to high
    the believer that fell... so far

    Been there, and felt that. Those words rang too true for me.

    One minor editing note there, should it be "I am the dream, that flee TOO high"?

    Pen on, pen on.


    • Endeavor gold member
      August 9, 2008
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      Slicks


      Thank you for your very kind comment
      I made the correction, you are correct
      Pleased you could relate to the words

      Thank you for the three Smilies, Rick


  • ShaShay
    August 8, 2008
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    Very nicely done. I will comment again at judging. Thanks for entering ~Poo~


    • Endeavor gold member
      August 8, 2008
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      Thank you Poo


      I could not say as much as I may like
      Life has been glorious and brutial
      all in the same breif walk...

      Rick


  • Wolf Mancini
    August 8, 2008

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    Very soft

    Aside from being very, very well written...this is a tender flow of thought that you have shared.
    Beautiful and sad.
    You seem to be someone many would love to know.

    Great piece my friend!

    wolf


    • Endeavor gold member
      August 9, 2008
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      Wolf

      First, thank you for reading me
      and for the three smilies you gave

      Pleased you liked the flow of my thoughts
      As for me, most are attracted to my person and beliefs
      though some find me to be arrogant in my convictions.

      The world has changed around me
      and I have remained the same consertive person

      Thank you for saying great piece

      Rick


  • nichtmich silver member
    August 8, 2008

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    Wonderful ode to the journey of life, whatever your personal credo. The 5th stanza is my special favorite.


    • Endeavor gold member
      August 9, 2008
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      nichtmich

      Let me say you look realy good for 99 years old
      The gothic look realy goes well with your choise in cosmetics... lol

      Thank you for reading me
      I hope you will read others, since this is not my usual style
      I like the fifth as well

      Rick


  • Loveandblessings2u gold member
    August 8, 2008
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    Oh My Dear Mr.
    You truly are so many wonderful thing
    all rolled up into one amazing man.

    You are smart, wise, talented, a giver, and once in a while you're a taker. You have an magnificent soul and a heart of gold.

    We all live to die some day, but as long as you have your family and friends when the time comes, you won't be alone. Remember Heaven is the most beautiful place. God has seen all you have done in your life and I know he must be proud.

    You have been many place traveled many roads, seened many things. Not all may have been good, many may have put tears in your eyes. But what didn't make you fall, only made you stronger.

    You have been blessed with some very loving women over the years, and in return they have been blessed with you.

    You are an excellent father to your beautiful daughter.
    You have been a husband that many only get the chance to dream of.
    A war hero, who put his life on the line for his country.
    You are a son any parent would be proud of.
    A friend to more than even you know of.
    And to me you are the BEST !!! poet on earth.

    Some may think I've over done this, but honestly I can think of many other things that you are, and they are all good.
    But I'll end my comment now, only because I have to get ready for work LoL.

    Love your poem Mr.

    Loveandblessings2u & yours always
    Love Ya,
    Joyce


    • Endeavor gold member
      August 9, 2008
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      My Joy, My Joyce


      Such a long and lovely comment deserves an equal answer.

      I wish all would see me in the light you do.
      I would love to have you do my ulogely (spelling)
      Then I believe fine words would be said at my demise.

      Two people can look upon a person
      One sees a beautiful man or woman,
      whereas another may see them in distaine
      because they are, or... because they precieve they are
      wraped within there own motives, predujeces, or guilt.

      I love you because you always see me as a worthy human
      and for that, you always have a special place in my mind.
      You care for me the way a true friend should
      needing me, beyound my usefullness to you.
      I am pleased that my good, is not forgotten.

      Many christians could learn from your amazing care.
      I am blessed that you ever chose to love me
      and that you hold me still, in high reguard.

      We don`t need a dozen good friends in life to be fufilled
      but we all need a few, just like you.

      Even this, is a reflection, of who YOU are
      Again I thank you

      Yours, Rick


      • Loveandblessings2u gold member
        August 9, 2008

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        Hi Friend,
        Every word in my comments to you,
        are about the man I know, the way I
        see you to be. You have ALWAYS been so kine
        and caring and loving to me. You have
        loved me from the inside out. Never judge
        me, just respected me for the person
        that I am. So that is why I care so much for
        you. You are such a precious friend to me.
        I see only the good in you, because that
        is all I know.

        Loveandblessings2u & yours always
        Joyce


  • Stardust-luvr
    August 8, 2008

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    My dearest I hold you in my heart and share with you your ups and downs of lifes disheartened offerings as well as its wondrous joys. You are a vibrant spirit that has so much yet to peruse on this incredible journey called life.superb my dear friend and from knowing you and the passion in our writing we share your words brought tears to my spirit in want to embrace the path we traverse in poetic motion. well done and many blessings always xxxx


    • Endeavor gold member
      August 9, 2008

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      Stardust

      You always seem to hear the inner thoughts of my writing

      Your comment is both poetic and insiteful
      I thank you for always reading me

      If life was easy, anyone could do it well

      Rick


  • michellemybelle gold member
    August 8, 2008

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    Hi my friend.
    You have told your story well, your highs and lows, that make you who you are today. You are indeed a wonderful friend, to many, and a child that never grew up, I hope you never lose your wonder. A simple man...hum...I will think on that...lol
    I hope you find all you seek in writing to your ultimate end.
    blessings and love,
    Michelle


    • Endeavor gold member
      August 9, 2008
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      Sweet Michelle


      I thought further on you comment
      and decieded that you are right.

      I am probally not simple, at least in the mind
      so I changed the word to "common" which I am in many ways

      Thank you for your blessings and love
      I could not find a better sorce, for this reguard

      Love, Rickie


    • Endeavor gold member
      August 8, 2008
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      Morning Michelle

      Thank you for your very kind comment
      I think I am still a little kid
      with just a lot of serious shit to deal with... lol

      Love that you always see the good in me
      That`s why YOU, are my ultimate friend

      Love You
      Rick


  • Stardust-luvr
    July 30, 2008
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    hun it should be fairly easy as you are a remarkable man, poet, and above all a true friend with so much love and passion in your heart and soul to share with all. xxxxxxx much love and many blessings always xxxx

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