sitting alone in her lonely room she
looks & cuts
then counts the scars &
numbers every
1.one.1
2.two.2
3.three.3
no more t;e;a;r;s left to cry
too weak to +live+
too scared to -die-
her eyes are blank
like the pages of her d.i.a.r.y
she can never [think
of words to] write
doesn’t know how to say
what she needs to ~s~c~r~e~a~m~
she sits & counts & cannot move
to fill that empty space
with |w|o|r|d|s|
if she had a voice perhaps she’d pray
but that requires words
no voice no
words no
hope just scars
& cuts
& loneliness
in never-ending numbers
1.one.1
2.two.2
3.three.3
Author notes
So yeah. Dirty-pretty. Only my second attempt at this style so please don't be too harsh on me. I'm trying 
A contest entry
- D.I.R.T.Y. [p r e t t y] ♥ ConTest ♣ by Kathraina.
490 points, ended March 20, 37 entries
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This is such a sad tale.
Strong imagery and emotion here.
Great job! -
Not a style I particularly go for in general, but I felt this was written quite well. Best of luck in the contest.
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Wow I love this I personally can relate to these feeling and I'm not an expert on DP but this was pretty well done. Bravo and Good Luck!
~dawn♥
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i love the title,
but i don't usually like dirty pretty.
the ideas were very good
but some of the punctuation seemed a little unnecessary.
just my opinion & personal preference
good job ! -
very well written
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GOOD LUCK IN MY CONTEST. :]]
XOXOXKATiEXOXOX -
WOW
Wow I really like this
This has got to be one of my favorite poems Iv read on here
I can relate to this so much....
This is really amzing
Well done
x
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I think I like it. You kinda of painted a picture (no pun intended) And the imagery is very strong. For your first attemp at dirty pretty, it was well penned. Keep up the great work!
Warmest,
Mylee
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