It hurts to look in your direction
it hurts to look from afar
I hope you know you
have my heart
a burning crystal star.
I can never wrap these fingers
of mystery plagued sin
around your alluring exciting skin
can never experience your quench
on this love thirsty whench.
They say what I'm feeling's wrong;
I will hunger for you ever long
with eyes in a never ending "Love song"....
Author notes
I think this one needs some explaining (To the judge);
The girl I feel I am in love with is not considered "pretty" or "beautiful" or "hot". I am considered 'what you would call these things' apparantly ( I feel this is important for the overall message)
Yet, I feel I am in love with this woman, I think what makes a person truly beautiful is how you feel about them and how they make you feel. A note to your daughter, Don't look into the mirror, mirrors lie!
I tried to convey this through this poem but I don't think I did a good job, I'm sorry if I've wasted your time *fears whip*
A contest entry
- True Beauty by crazymomma.
1400 points, ended August 19, 2008, 31 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
How do you feel about this?
Comments
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Nearly forgot to give you applause on this.
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I like this. It seems to be a new style for you. However, that may just be because I haven't seen any of your works in so long. It is good to see you back. I have had a long stretch of really rotten experiences lately. It is good to see you back. I hope all is well with you.
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Maybe it is just me but I don't see what this has to do with the contest. It is a lovely write but just doesn't seem to fit at all. If you can explain what this has to do with "True Beauty" I will look at it again.
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I love it
Love is love, and I agree that it isn't what you see on the outside it is the true beauty that is inside that matters the most. You have the right idea...great write from a very intuitive young one.
~mandie~
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