The bear went cruising in the woods
and saw some fish and went fishing
and caught 16 fish. Then he went to
his cave but it was winter and closed
so he went fishing again but the water
was frozen so he stomped it with his
paw and broke it and caught another
fish and ate it.
by Isaac
A contest entry
- Children's Contest: For Children 8 and under by Shutting down.
600 points, ended August 18, 2008, 5 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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beautifull nice poem
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congratulations isaac on winning a shiny trophy. keep writting son. someday you will have the world flowing just like the ink in your pen.
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Thank you for entering our contest!
This is a great poem!
I think the bear did a pretty good job of saving his food.
And I love the rugrats background.
Shari
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Hello Isaac
What a cute image of the bear breaking through the ice to have 17 fish
Wonderful poem hun
Best of luck!
♥
Stay safe
~Manda
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Hehe, very cute. I love how you said he went "cruising" in the woods, instead of just saying he went in the woods. Great job! I wish I would have started writing as young as you. So keep writing, you'll be an awesome poet one day!
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Aww, that's cute!
"The bear went cruising in the woods" is such a great phrase, especially with the verb "cruising". That makes it feel as if the bear is really on a mission! Good luck in the contest! I think you deserve a trophy!
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what a wonderful write, it made me think and close my eyes to think and also image the bear that you have written about here. you have used some powerful words to paint the picture within your words and that is very creative. wel done and best of luck
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Hello.
After reading this I started to think of what type of bear you were writing about, and I just smiled. This reminds me of the move "Brother Bear", maybe you've seen it? Great write Isaac. Good luck to you in the contest. -
Good luck in the contest!
Great job Isaac!
This is something my own son would love to read about. I can see the the bear clearly in my mind, stomping the ice and eating the fish.
I hope you will keep writing and sharing your stories/poems.
~Kristy
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hey kiddo, this is cute you know and I could see in my mind what you were saying. hehehe cute... Best wishes in the contest, love ya Gma
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Hey Isaac, what happened to the other 16 fish, lol... This is cute and it made me smile, you are a character little boy
love, mom
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thanks mom
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The Bear broke the ice?
I’ll bet if he brought a fish back to the cave
they’d let him in for the winter.
Oh, I like your bear, I think you have created a character.
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thank you for commenting on my sons poem
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Aww this is so cute, I loved this, i think you shouldn't give away the name straight away but this is lovely its so cute, thank you for entering,
all my love,
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aww this is really cute! you did a wonderful job! Bears sure do love hose fish!!! I really loved this! you really painted a wonderful picture of a bear eating a fish bravo!!!
Best of luck in the contest!
Angel
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Aww a lovely entry indeed I think you gave away the name of your animal a little too soon though.
Thank you so much for your entry into our contest
gaylene
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Thanks for entry
lol Bears like to eat fishes don't they, I can almost see the bear stomping his paw against the lake.
Good luck honey in the contest.
God Bless
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