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An Insider's View

they saw
her glistening eyes shimmering like
diamonds,
lighting up the dark night
sky.

they saw
perfection in every step she took
a mouth ready to tell the truth
ears ready to hear.
from her perfectly styled blonde hair
to her perfectly pedicured toes
they beauty
that was only
skin-deep.

i
saw right through that.

i saw
her ruby lips curve into a
smirk.
laughing inside. laughing at
me.

i saw
what she had done.

i saw
lies,
deception,
dishonesty.

oh, and
pain.
forever pain.

that
was what i really saw.

i took one last look, then turned away.


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  • AnonymousXO
    July 30, 2008

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    Maybe you should go into more detail about what you saw through her. If you like it the way it is then dont fix it but if you dont then fix the grammar. And ever should be every =]
    Nice write!
    AnonymousXO