Love's cradle intoxicates the air,
With passionate embers that explode from ivory cigarettes.
Ashes fall from the dainty stick,
As time ticks on the cedar grandfather clock.
She takes one last final breath,
And exhales her life to
Save his.
Author notes
Contest for Angelflower:
http://allpoetry.com/contest/2416091
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This poem is about a woman who gives her life to save the man she loves. Since he has cancer. I just got so inspired by this picture! Hope you like it!
A contest entry
- Quickie...........Pic Prompt.. by Angelflower.
600 points, ended July 31, 2008, 7 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Tell Me What You Think!
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wow that was really amazing i loved it your last few lines were definitely my fav great write very touching...
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I like your use of colours as a tool for imagery. And love the delay of the final line, gives a bit of a shock when you eventually get there! Love the poem!
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I love this. It's so beautiful, just a gorgeous write. I love the descriptions and details that you've used. Congrats on the trophy.
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I always wanted to see something spectacular in simple English and you just provided it. I didn't have to read your explanation to know what you were saying to the reader, in such a subtle way. Bravo!
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Interesting
I can tell there's more to this than what's there
It definitely makes the reader want to dig deeper
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aww thats so sweet!
this is an amazing poem
filled with emotion goodjob on the silver
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This is beautiful, congratulations on the silver. The imagery is wonderful.
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whisper
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Ooh very original... tick-tock, tick-tock.
Nice use of vocabulary, I see the Thesaurus is your bestfriend
Well little one, you have muchos talentos.
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Increbile poem, very cleverly written, i love the last bit
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This was a wonderful write.. I really loved the flow and imagery here.. you did such a wonderful job!! The emotion was so heartfelt and beautiful!!! thank you very much for sharing!! I really enjoyed reading this!!! best of luck!
Angel
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