Between bad dreams and the rendezvous,
lack of sleep has gotten the best of you.
your eyelids seem made of lead,
and within minutes you become a bobble head.
Without notice not even a single peep,
you knod yourself off to sleep.
It can be while your eating or talking on the phone,
in the middle of a huge crowd or on a bench all alone.
You have abused your beautiful body which I adore,
and pushed it's limit until it can take no more.
Dividing yourself between kids, work and school
if you stop for a second your eyes close, your head knods and you drool.
Life has changed you from the high school beauty,
to a on the go working mom who is a major cutie.
I know this isn't the fairytale life of your childhood dreams.
And that you are just trying to keep life from coming apart at the seams.
It will all be worth it someday you'll see.
And just know you will always be a superhero mom to me.
A contest entry
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Comments
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a mothers job is never done,but I can't wait to see the big payoff,beautiful write.
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I love this ....thank you
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very strong it is true moms all ages work hard to keep us safe
thank you for entering much love
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that's wonderful. Reminds me of someone I'm close to, a very strong woman, excellent write, I liked this
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I love it!!!!
Thanks for entering and GL
HALEIGH -
Lovely.
I know this isn't the fairytale life of your childhood dreams.
And that you are just trying to keep life from coming apart at the seams.
It will all be worth it someday you'll see.
And just know you will always be a superhero mom to me.
I also love the bobble head part! But lets talk about this particular stanza. I feel it's a bit forced rhyme, but it's flowy. That takes alot of talnet to do. Great job and good luck!
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the bobble head part was so cute...
i enjoyed -
Outstanding
She will be so touched by this beautiful tribute to her attributes, you find to love...this actually brought tears to even my eyes. Being a mother we are not seen in all our glory, so to love her heart and appreciate what she does says alot about you both.
hugs
~Lisa~
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did you perhaps mean "rendezvous"? nice poem, the rhyme is fair, the rhythm and enjambment good, and the tone swet. nicely penned. peace
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