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black

Deep abyss of night echoes throughout the silence

Alone within your presence surrounded by the vast darkness

Kissing the sweetness from my lips making your way down

Tongue flowing with the vivid pulse massaging in a circular motion around

Palms cup my breast with fingers trailing along my ripened nipples

Rotating back and forth across each as the sensation twirls in ripples

As the stars illuminate in the heavens outlining the silhouette of my body

Traveling lower between my thighs giving exposure to my sexuality

Licking all over it roaming through the intensity of this heat

Feening for more as your digits dance to the rhythm of an incessant beat

With each touch to the inside of me indulged by the movement of your thickness

Stirring the juices engulfed within the surging ocean of my pure richness

Taking control of you gripping your masculinity to stroke it beyond hardness

Rubbing the erection against my entrance inviting it within my wetness

Feeling for the spot moving inwards closer to combine

Thrusting in and out gently hands embracing every vertebrae of your spine

Cradling my derrière as your body sensuously rolls into mine

Wrapping my legs around you increasing the depth of your applied pressure

Venturing further within me stimulating the eruption of my moisture

Continuously working me deeper into this forbidden ecstasy

Inebriated by you rubbing against my throbbing sensitivity

As you caress your lips to my mouth to savor the passionate potion

Enveloped in the warm exhales of this constant mesmerizing emotion

With the consummation of darkness giving way to the dawning light

Witnessing the sunshine slowly breaking through the black sky of night

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  • Desire gold member
    August 21, 2008

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    Thank You!!

    Thank You for Your entry: black
    This piece tugged hard and awakened everything dormant While I was reading which I do several times~ Images come to me in many forms~ while taking in Your words: sensation twirls in ripples~ Now I must say You also took the reader on a Journey and after reading Your words- kept seeing a lollipop being licked- and a female in piggy tails as if role playing- if that makes sense- and this lollipop is HUGE- like one You find at Disneyland -The title left me pondering- for when I glanced upon it- for someeeeeee reason I kept getting this feel of *dark* Erotica- now not because of the word black- that is one of my favorite colors- but the energy that I felt within that word- probably the only minor thing that slowed me down while reading was the spacing- the pause- kept my Mind in mid-air waiting to come back down for more- now it is just me- I read pieces several times anyways- I just had to go back and re-read the previous line to continue the flow- Your images gave much to feast with-I'm not picky whether there is punctuation or not as long as I don't get lost in the words and lose my place~Everybody has his or her own style preference so I take that in consideration I won't write a novel of a comment this time but in summary
    Magnificent pre-write entered ~
    Congratulations on Your HM
    Challenge Matrix:
    spelling/grammar/punctuation- 20
    presentation/creativity- 18
    how well you handled the challenge-20
    "grab me" effect (how much did we enjoy reading this piece)- 18
    overall-20
    For a total of 96 points
    Sensual images & message You have brought forth

    Thank You for sharing Your Talent!
    Hope to read more...
    Best wishes to You in the challenge Sweet Soul
    **Judging will be done shortly...
    Many blessings too
    and much love & light~ Desire~*~


  • Blissfullhatred silver member
    August 20, 2008
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    very good.
    Billy's Baby


  • Master Ktulu silver member
    August 20, 2008

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    I liked the sensuality of this however, I feel that it would have been much better had the beginning to every line not been capitalized and there had been punctuation as well.

    **Master Ktulu**


  • Elfin
    August 5, 2008
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    Cold shower here I come !!!!!
    Well done and good luck in the contest. Val

  • Poetryintheblood gold member
    August 4, 2008
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    Thank you for your sensually powered submittal, good luck in my contest, Josie


  • In Too Deep1
    August 1, 2008

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    Very impressive penning. I am going to have to read more of your writing. I loved your flow and art. Congrats on HM


  • theredcatjazzoflove gold member
    July 31, 2008

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    yea this was smoothed ARTIST i think you really did a great job being highly romantic with your piece here good luck in the contest


  • Swangrnv gold member
    July 30, 2008
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    aahh...

    now this is yeah, ...l.o.l. good! Nice piece!

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