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Razor Blade Tears

running down your face
Like raindrops on a rose petals
Cutting every pore
With a tiny sharp blade
A knife in disguise
mascara runs down your cheeks
turning your skin shades of grey and black
reminding you there is no going back
the day he hurt you again
the day he tried to kill you
a memory so close in your heart
you never want to believe
admitting he is an ass is a good start
after that day he broke your heart
tissues to wipe your tears away
you are sick of the stupid games he likes to play
and you need to move on
you may lose your life to him someday




 


Author notes

for my wifey crazy christina
2.Cutting
my own thoughts

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  • Black Rayne
    November 7, 2008
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    wise words indeed
    thank you for this emotional entry


  • Justmenow
    September 10, 2008

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    i think this poem is so good and it is definitely a brilliant write

    'running down your face
    Like raindrops on a rose petals
    Cutting every pore
    With a tiny sharp blade
    A knife in disguise
    mascara runs down your cheeks
    turning your skin shades of grey and black '

    my favourite part, well done


  • darlintlc silver member
    August 30, 2008

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    I think the title says it all...razor blade tears!
    Great title!!

    my favorite part:

    "Cutting every pore
    With a tiny sharp blade
    A knife in disguise"

    To me this can mean verbal abuse also!

    Thanks for entering
    darlintlc


  • skilter
    August 15, 2008

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    hmm... being a guy, i can still relate... girls can be so mean as well. good write and thank you for sharing.


  • LadyLuff
    August 11, 2008
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    i can totally relate to this!!
    great write and so sad..


  • BrokenDawn
    August 7, 2008

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    Very sad and very dark, I can understand and relate to this well. Very well written thanks for entering!
    Bravo and Good Luck!
    ~dawn♥


  • HiddenByTheDark
    August 6, 2008

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    I can relate to this and it is good to leave the guy before things get bad again. People can't always change.. good luck & keep penning

    ♥always Kate


  • Maxboy gold member
    August 5, 2008

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    Truely a heart breaking poem, very sad.

    Good luck in the contest.


  • LittleDecoy
    August 5, 2008

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    great poem!
    i really enjoyed reading it!

    "A knife in disguise
    mascara runs down your cheeks
    turning your skin shades of grey and black"

    i love those lines more than you can know.
    i love the play on mascara being like a knife. absolutely fantastic!!

    good luck in my contest & thanks for entering!


  • echo-ink
    August 5, 2008
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    A very emotional write.

    Thanks for entering and good luck in my contest. PL


  • xCandieKissesx
    August 5, 2008
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    Nice!

    Very nicely done.
    Great job and good luck!


  • gmmike
    July 30, 2008
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    A really nice poem like always. Keep up the good work.


  • Hopeless Romantic09
    July 30, 2008
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    Interested

    "Like raindrops on rose petals" I love your comparisons and your details.. Quite well written


  • peregrin
    July 30, 2008
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    I like the piece, it is well written and I like the flow and what not.
    Good luck in my contest.


  • Bruised.Roses
    July 30, 2008

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    wow this was phenominal just a delight to read. it was so filled with emotion it seemed to drip from every word...I loved it and can truely relate I thank you for entering and wish you luck
    xox
    Tash


  • Mistress Masquerade
    July 30, 2008

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    "loose" should be lose, maybe, I dunno, just my thought on this really powerful poem. The emotion here was amazing and really pained. It brought a friend of mine to mind. Great write Amy!


  • Commodore Rouge
    July 30, 2008
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    Wow, I can really feel the emotion in this! You portrayed your feelings so well, I'm impressed! I like the phrase,
    "Like raindrops on a rose petals
    Cutting every pore"
    That stuck with me for a while, I want to steal those words! Great job, thanks for sharing!


  • alice-in-wonderland
    July 30, 2008
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    amy i love this poem. great write. you should put some more up soon!

    butterfly


  • Lonely Christina
    July 30, 2008

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    wow amy, this is really true, so true im like crying my eyes out rite now wow...all i can say is wow im so speechless...thanks 4 the poem
    xoxo- christina

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