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Best Friend - Worst Enemy

I found a new friend today,

A friend to take my fears away.

It is a friend that you must buy,

It has a name its called a high.

 

It seems to be the latest style,

Your welcome here, lets smoke awhile.

It turns me loose, it sets me free,

From the dullness of reality.

 

But sometimes though I start to wonder,

Does it lift me up or drag me under?

The fears it took were only hidden,

And feelings seem to be forbidden.

 

Now my friend has turned on me,

And thus become my enemy.

I think about the price I pay,

and go get high anyway.

 

I try to stop but it doesnt last,

I give in as I have in the past.

Inside it seems Im always crying,

Why do I feel as if Im dying?

 

 

 

 

 

 

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  • AutumnsFlame
    August 30, 2008
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    I like the rhyme and rhythem of this a lot! But I would like to point out a grammar error:

    I try to stop but it doesnt last,
    I give in as I have in the past.
    Inside it seems Im always crying,
    Why do I feel as if Im dying?

    "Im" should be "I'm"

    Other than that, I think you have the rhyme down, but now you should work on imagery and description. Thank you for entering my contest.

  • precious10
    July 30, 2008
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    You took the words right out of my mouth msbeav!!!!!
    Right on Sister!!