saved a letter to you
as a draft
in my stomach
stamped it with a butterfly wing
and emptied myself of everything
else
and it's time to love a clown
it's time to love a clown
it's time to love a clown
time to love a clown
ask the jeweler
to reshape my stomach
you keep the diamond
and i might just
save the wedding ring as a draft
save the wedding ring as a draft
it's time to love a clown
time to love a clown
with my ears like thunder
it's time to love a clown
with my lips like baking powder
it's time to love a clown
with my toes like mornings
it's time to love a clown
with my voice like broken strings
it's time to love a clown
time to love a clown
for beautiful he is
Author notes
You can see me sing & sorta mime this on http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=P1Nm3Nk1BmE
Background courtesy of http://www.simpsonstrivia.com.ar/simpsons-photos/wallpapers/krusty-the-clown.gif
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100th Hoodwink!
I think this is a delightful poem, and it is time to love a clown, for clowns are always there to cheer us, and make us laugh. Although I have heard some people are deathly afraid of clowns, I expect the victims of John Wayne Gacy came to feel that way... lol. Seriously this is a great piece!
Love & Light
Debbera
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100th Hood-Wink!
Wow! I really love these lyrics - the idea is wonderful and the background is hilarious
... there is really not much else I can say - this is effective and easy to read - has lots of interpretations and I really love the way it has a hidden warning (maybe not-so-hidden ) - fabulous!
Keep writing
Polly
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To me, here it sounds as if the narrator is admitting they are being fooled. Although, at the same time, clowns make you laugh, so perhaps she has decided that it's high time to get frivolous with love, sometimes matters of the heart can become so serious, whether it's between family, friends or lovers - it's easy to get caught up in things that don't matter in the face of it and lose sight of the simplicity of just appreciating the fun you can have.
I found the first strophe intriguing, a lot of people would say that the words begin in the mind and technically, they do, but, you do get a kind of whirly feeling in the stomach - the emotion connected to the words appears to manifest in the stomach, in different forms depending on the emotion. Well, that's how I took the first part, I'm not sure if that was your intent or not, but I like what I got from it.
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Thanks! That's exactly how I meant it
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Oh how nice thank you for commenting on your poetry.
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very good
very good!! This poem is abstract, happy and fun. I wouldn't be able to give any help because I'm just new at writting anyway
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Hi Diana, I think this is an incredible poem and you are looking very svelte! I do enjoy reading this more than seeing the enactment of it though because I felt the poem was much more abstract and interesting when I didn't associate it with an actual wedding ring - etc. Acting it out was, I am sure, therepeutic and stimulating for you personally, but as a reader, I want to bring my own ideas into what this could mean - I just thought the line about "save the wedding ring as a draft" and the concept of asking a jewler to reshape someone's stomach were brilliant. I guess I am the same way with wanting to hear a song before seeing the video and also read a book before seeing a movie.
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-with my lips like baking powder
that's the only thing i, personally, had a problem with.
other than that, well done.
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I loved it.
It was a pleasure to read your poem.
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Love turned upside down, upside down, can lead one to need to love a clown, to dance on window sills and taste the clouds.
I especially like the opening stanza because I can see the broken (fragile) butterfly that you were, torn asunder by disappointment.
LOVE this.
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Wow, your comment is overall almost more poetic than my poem itself
Thank you for letting me know what you think. It means much to me 
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yeah real great writer like my best friend dienush can write this..i really liked the poem and the background..
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Wow, very interesting I must say! A beautiful clown. I never would have thought. Excellent job with making it into a song too! The only thing I would advise is remember to capitalize your "I"s, as well as other things. Keep up the good work! Thanks for entering, good luck.
~Cj
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Thanks The I's were uncapitalized on purpose.
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you are one of the most creative poets i know on here, keep it flowing and i think i will listen to that song. and good luck in the contest
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