here are lines that
hang like golden ropes
across the night’s crevasse
they thrum and
keen within the wind of
secret isolation
hand to wing
clicking teeth upon the tightrope
poets rhyme the moon
swaying
badged like heroes
unfurling flags of dream
sleeping birds along the power cables
changeless in the
sour grip of time
Author notes
Prompt: "I view poetry as a medium that invites one to evoke thoughtful emotion.”
- P. A. Lamppa
A contest entry
- #104 at Winklings for Winklings and Friends elsewhere of Pamela A Lamppa by Lyndon.
6000 points, ended August 28, 2008, 17 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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I like this a lot for the appealing sense of depth, thoughtful depth; the imagery leads from place to place like a string of islands in a sea...each with something of beauty or interest to offer...Thank you for this fine entry into the contest and best of luck in the judging...PK
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A solid poem nicely written (:
Loved the idea abt the tight rope!
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Wow. This is so beautifully written to my quote. How wonderful. I love the sour grip of time. I swear I felt that in my jaw. Well done. You have made me smile again with your words.
~Pamela 
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You did well with making this fit the prompt. It has a nice flow to it. Very enjoyable read. Pen on...~Poo~
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Very nice poem. Love the use of simile in stanzas 1 and 4. Good tight language-- not a word wasted or out of place. Very well done.
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WOW!!!
This was such a well put together piece. Loved it!!
Vivid imagery and wonderful flow
Good luck in the contest!
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Vivid, evocative imagery right from the outset and I liked the sense of movement you create with 'thrum' in stanza 2. Great use of metaphor and the sheer abstraction of this piece makes it work so very, very well. Profound and thought provoking, refreshing to read something that isn't introspective or comparatively self indulgent. Thanks for sharing, great work, keep writing, it's the best.
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Yet another glorious example of sublime poetry. Are you published yet? Can I be your rabid number 1 fan (wonder who else I'm vying with for that title)? I wish I could meet you in real life, that would make stalking easier (eh, I joke, or do I?). I wish there was a way to feature POETS and not just snippets of their work.
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Boffo!
This is tight and provocative
Love the layering of metaphor because you made it work.
"lines that
hang like golden ropes
across the night’s crevasse"
"clicking teeth upon the tightrope
poets rhyme the moon"
"sleeping birds along the power cables"
And the conclusion: "changless in the sour grip of time" had my head nodding.
Good luck in the contest.
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