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Death Defying Love


Whether it be
The depths of despair surrounding me
Or you deliberately drowning me
I'm dying no longer trying to acquire air into my lungs
Because of the desire of death that you have brung

Not only did you leave me
But I
Let you deceive me
as i
Naively believed we could still be

I was all alone when you made your way home
And decided to kiss me
With the tenderness of your lips
See I'd been in an abyss
Forgot what bliss could be
Forgot that it was your deathly kiss that at once made me happy
And then in the midst of our lip lock you looked at the clock and darted out the door..
-and no i never cried like that before-
Mascara ran as I fell to the floor..
I heard you shout.. clearly scream out "DON'T CRY I'LL BE BACK"..
Sadly you lack the art of lying..
And though devastated I knew as it was
That your descent down the deepening dark path was death defying love

So maybe i only have paper thin memories of what me and you once were but could never be
We were black and white lost the fight, and I know in my sight all is going to be all right

Because of our

Death Defying Love

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  • PrabhuDayal Khattar gold member
    August 14, 2008

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    The thoughts are flying like the several pieces of the clouds in the sky completely loaded with the water to rain..and this is the strength of this work..I love this..well done...


  • smonte19124 gold member
    August 14, 2008

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    SECOND PRIZE
    This was so beautifully sad that it touched my heart. Good luck in the contest you are deserving of a prize.

  • Deaths-Gift-My-Curse
    August 13, 2008
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    First

    This poem has a smooth style and a good rhythm. It's easy to read and very touching.


  • Poetryistherapy
    August 3, 2008

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    This was an awesome entry, i love the format you used here!!

    Thank you for entering my contest, and for following my rules! Good Luck!


  • Shrat
    July 30, 2008
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    I like it, but something about it just doesnt want to grab me, and make me keep reading. Not to say that it isnt good, its just not amazing. Its really cool though, and sad as well. It is defenitely too good to have gone unnoticed. Nice job, and thanks for following all the rules!

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