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the truth is...

 

Disregard the sacred
as I peel back the skin
Writing anthems of remorse
amongst my pale skin.

The truth is
I want to say what I feel inside.
But when the blade takes my breath away
My words won't formulize.

If I'm as strong as I think I am, I can do this

So across my mistreated epidermis
I no longer let the blade lay.
I will rise above my once gathered ashes,
and my thoughts, I'll verbalize.

Truth is, I knew I could.

 

 

Author notes

Prompt: "...you still have to find the strength to say in words, what you would normally say on your skin.” - unknown

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  • Clovis...Curious silver member
    December 18, 2008

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    Excellent

    A very fine write, indeed. You have expressed your thoughts quite clearly. Thanks for sharing this one with us.


  • nobodys looking
    December 18, 2008

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    amazing strength in the promt, and you carried it over wonderfully into the poem. I really love your line "If i'm as strong as I think I am, I can do this"
    great job!


  • Nienna Calmcacil
    December 18, 2008

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    I've felt like this before. Pretty perfect, really.

    You're a great poet, I must say...I'm gonna fave you just for the hell of it.

    <3


  • Olinda
    December 18, 2008

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    Disregard the sacred
    as I peel back the skin
    Writing anthems of remorse
    amongst my pale skin.


    That was beautiful. An amazing poem, expressing pain and strength. I love the way this was written, and your words flow beautifully. Great job!


  • Hydrogen
    December 18, 2008
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    Nice writting, it does explain alot ... Cuttin' is not an easy habit to give up ...


  • Lady Australis silver member
    July 30, 2008

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    i think this is really great
    you got the emotion of a cutter through your not one
    well done


  • ml12
    July 30, 2008

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    I like how optimistic the ending is. I really liked "as I peel back the skin" because of the lack of emotion expressed. Good luck in the contest!

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