Let the rain wash over us as your lips entrance mine.
Let our heart speak softly as
we share a passionate embrace with the raindrops.
Let no words come between us,
only our soul’s sonnet;
speaking the words we are too afraid to muster.
A single soul dwelling in two bodies,
I love passionately, live freely, is one.
Author notes
Kudos to SKEM9 for the layout pic, it's awesome.
Megz... just some clarity of my piece; the second line might sound like a typo when you read it - "Let our heart speak softly as" - I'm intending it to be ONE single heart, just so you know. Trying to show how two people are so deeply in love that they share the same heart and soul, just two different bodies.
And one last thing, "I love passionately, live freely, is one." Apparently 'is' is grammatically correct according to my Office Word thing. It kind of helps the title I guess.
(Listen to the song, I.M.E. I Is Us, it's pretty pimp, so I used it as the title!)
A contest entry
- Semi-Quickie Pic Prompt; 10/60 by perfectsunset.
475 points, ended August 10, 2008, 6 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Excellent. So soft and sweet, but yet powerful and tantalizing (spelling?). It's like making love, only poem style.
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Thank you very much!
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Wow, I really like this one... The way you you discribe this is awesome.. To me it paints a lovely pisture of two people in the rain who really care about each other.. You did an awesome job Sarah.. Keep up the good work..
Karrie
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Thanks Karrie!
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Wow, this was so passionately penned with true words of love and romance. You took the picture and made it shine so very bright. This really touched my heart.
You are very talented Sar, I'd love to see more poems from you like this. Simply amazing. & it's brevity lingers long after being read.
Best of luck & thanks for entering
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Aw thanks! =]
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