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Night's Secret

A velvet blanket,
envelops the sky
Shadowing the land,
whilst calming all living

Night's Serenity

A sea of darkness,
seeps in every corner
Blackens the skies;
vanishing the Sun.

Night's Power

A shroud of dew,
falls on the ground
Renewing the Earth,
and bringing life

Night's Gift

A sinister fear,
grips at hearts
Triggering imagination,
bestowing evil in our minds

Night's Treachery

A cloud of frost,
concealing the creatures
Stealing many lives,
and asphyxiates the animated

Night's Curse

A crafty being,
deceives all around
Offering gifts,
but for a price

Night's Secret

Author notes

1] Write a poem where the words dance. Not a poem about dance, but where the words waltz or swing or something--give it character, alliteration, purpose, metaphor, and an accurate grasp of the English language accompanied with an understanding of the three syllable word. Meters, rhymes, shapes

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  • UnManned4Ever
    December 8, 2008
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    This is neat how it starts out so peaceful, adn then climaxes to the main part. Great job! :


  • Dreamer42morrow
    October 12, 2008

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    WOW. Who knew so many different things could erupt from one word, "night"? incredible!! *steals Whitneys ahmazing poem ability!* =O hehe.

    ~Mariah!~

  • NinaNightmare
    August 20, 2008
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    Such vivd imagery
    I love it
    =3

    ~Christina


  • Rejected Easter Egg
    August 19, 2008

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    hmmmm my stalkee has a nice way with words muhaha!
    Stalk ya later alligator
    Love and well done whit


  • Atrophya
    August 18, 2008
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    words and rhythmn, they truly complete each other ^_^


  • Anna-the-Android
    August 4, 2008

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    Your absolute best.

    I can't believe this was written by someone your age.
    I'm being 100% honest when I say that this is an amazing poem.


  • ByeAPCommunity
    July 30, 2008
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    this is beautiful!!! i loved it :]]]]


  • questionmark.
    July 30, 2008

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    this is so amazing..i love the flow it has and all the metaphoric means

    it's an amazing write , great job!

    ~Bethh


  • NyteShade
    July 30, 2008

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    Nicely written Whit. This poem has a nice flow to it. The Night has many Secrets. Sometimes it's even more beautiful then the day.


  • Dmonik
    July 30, 2008

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    Nicely done Whit.
    I really liked this. There is only one thing I'd change, but that's my personal preference anyway, lol 'Blackens the skies;
    vanishing the Sun.' I'd change to Banishing the Sun...it makes the darkness seem more powerful,.....

    Well written, great flow and structure.
    Bravo

    'D'


  • Lost Vampyre Angel
    July 30, 2008

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    this is lovely hun, i really enjoyed reading this,
    it is so calm and serene and i really think this is great
    all my love,
    kitty xxx


  • Aquarius
    July 30, 2008

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    Oh my goshh, this is really good, Whitney. I love all the metaphoric things. Then I simply love the main idea itself; Night.
    Very good.


  • Lulu28
    July 30, 2008
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    this 1 was really pretty!

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