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her eyes screamed the saddest apology

 

In my head are words I can't express.
I want to formulate my response to all my unhappiness.
But for some reason, I can't speak a sound.
I am slowly killing what we had,
since I can't speak to you.
 
I'm lonely and alone,
and I just want to hold you.
It's so empty inside this heart of mine,
since you left it vacated.
 
I never meant to hurt you,
and make our love bleed, as if it was dying.
Now, you won't even look at me.
 
If I could scream the loudest goodbye,
in only words that we could hear,
I would spend my days and nights
on the right things to recite.
 
I understand that "I'm sorry" won't cut it,
not with wounds this deep.
 

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  • lovely write...starightforward and emotional...

  • The last two lines are my life right now:
    I know that saying I'm sorry will never be enough and can't change anything that has happened.

    I have put my husband through sooooo much. I know I don't deserve his love.

    Wonderful write! Thanks so much for sharing. It helps to know someone else has been there, felt this way.


  • Ti Amo Te Quiero
    August 12, 2008

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    AWESOME

    I love how you express yourself in this poem!! "I understand that I'm sorry won't cut it. Not with wounds this deep" Love this line!! Nice read. Keep writing ya!!


  • 2lullabyhaven
    August 7, 2008

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    You take us on such rich journeys of the heart, sometimes people write for others who are in to much pain to articulate lol Congrats on your trophies


  • Redeemed15
    August 6, 2008

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    Chris, This is an awesome poem. I understand the feelings that you have woven deep in the stanzas of this poem. I can't;I want;I can't;I am;I can't; I never. These words can hold so much within them. Many times we never mean to hurt someone, but we do and it is often irrepairable. I'm sorry almost never cuts it. But to hear that from someone could bring you back.

    -Juli


  • Amana Araya Jabari
    August 6, 2008
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    Wow umm wow I liked the sty;e and the feeling


  • xCandieKissesx
    August 5, 2008

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    Speechless!

    Great write! I really felt the depth and imagery glide off the page!

    I understand that I'm sorry won't cut it.
    Not with wounds this deep.

    Those are some sweet lines there! Great job and good luck!


  • Fallen Hard
    August 1, 2008
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    wow

    I'm speechless very good!


  • Brit-Girl
    August 1, 2008

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    I like the emotional tone to this piece and the last lines were potent.
    thank you for your entry!


  • alesana
    July 30, 2008

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    I love it is this a song because if it isnt it so is. lol. i like this one alot especially the line sorry wont cut it with wounds this deep. i fucking love that and wish i wrote it. bad ass write


  • blood-for-ink
    July 30, 2008
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    i really love this! good rite bro bro
    luvs *huggles chris*


  • XxemohatexX
    July 30, 2008

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    If I could scream the loudest goodbye,
    in only words that we could hear.

    I understand that I'm sorry won't cut it.
    Not with wounds this deep.

    are my favrote lines they are realy great you wright like a profesinol great poetic devices and greast language you realy have a gift dont ever stop wrighting


  • Number 13
    July 30, 2008

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    Wow.. you're incredible!

    "I understand that I'm sorry won't cut it.
    Not with wounds this deep. "

    Don't you hate it when I'm sorry can't fix things, not even in the slightest? It's so frustrating because you know it's nothing more than words and that no matter how many times or how loud you say it, it won't make the pain stop, nor the tears or anything else.

    Ah, keep up the great work ♥♥♥


  • FindingMeInJesus
    July 30, 2008

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    Wow...

    Chris,
    I love this...I can't even express how it makes me feel with words...But I love it... Such deep sadness, paiun and emotion, and just the relatability of it.... It just...Idk...

    Beautiful job!
    Love it!

    Always,
    Me

  • ktrenerow
    July 29, 2008
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    Was okay

  • ktrenerow
    July 29, 2008
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    ok


  • MaMa-2-be-Cindy
    July 29, 2008

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    This is emotionally deeo and the pain so present Cuz

    you do have a gift in being able to share your feelings..took me forever to be able to, but I was so glad when I could

    it is therapy through poetry to write these poems, in my oinion..it helps us sort out our thoughts, our feelings and even our pains..

    Touching deep words here Cuz, thank you for sharing

    Cind's


  • penman gold member
    July 29, 2008
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    Excellent

    Whew! Amazing write, So very well expressed as always.


  • blue-eyed-disaster
    July 29, 2008

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    wow, this was amazing...lots of emotion described in some perfect words. your expression was great. very nice!


  • IrishGypsyRose silver member
    July 29, 2008

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    Incredible

    One thing line two of stanza one formulate is misspelled otherwise a fantastic write from a great poet. Thank you for sharing...I loved the last two lines immensely btw. ~gypsy~

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