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with ink of sunlight







I am writing to address you
on the subject of your hair; it's short, choppy & blown
like a half-cropped dandelion. you remind me
of a cat, purring and sun-warmed - I
have never seen you angry, even at me. I
would like to hold your hand. it
might be smaller than mine, I don't know, but I suspect
it would be soft - you're a singer, a flautist, there'll be
no calluses from guitars. your voice is like honey. it's ridiculous
how talented you are, how tiny and huge, delicate
in a way that's impossible to miss. we laughed together, the other day -
you made me act out the stupidest things. charades, geek-style - a 'natural log'
because
there is nothing about you which is slow. but this is a letter
written on clouds - I fear paper would rip
were I to pen it. I'll remain,
your Echo -

(you make someone smile
just by being)








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Prompt five, 'letter to a crush'

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  • TChaplinette
    July 30, 2008
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    that was ok.

    it didn't really have a lot of imagery until the end, which was my favoite line.

    "but this is a letter written on clouds - I fear paper would rip were I to pen it. I'll remain, Your Echo -"

    that was a nice touch.

    thanks for entering.
    and good luck.
    ♥taylor