Peace Of Mind
No End In Sight.
Sinners Like These
Fly Higher Than Kites.
When They're Ready To Land
They'll Fall Down Like Sprites.
A Truly Calming Comedown
With Pleasant Dreams In Sight.
A contest entry
- Searching by crivanea.
300 points, ended August 5, 2008, 21 entries
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Anything I Should Change?
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nute rhyme..although the poem is can be longer..w/ more thoughts,...add some metaphor..use some better vocab..but its a good topic..nice poem..short and to the point..good luck in the contest
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Clever
Its quite short, but itys has an intresting mix and twist of words, i like the ending, very nice -
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Just a small suggestion for you but I found it hard to read what the poem was with the background as they were a hard mix of contrast. try changing to a lighter or less detailed background so that others can read it easier.
I lvoe the simplicity to this piece and yet how it speaks with a lot of thought and imagery. it had truth within it and this was put across strongly with your own thoughts. well don e
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