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Exchange of Value

Our relationship was
a commodity-

no different from the millions
of exchanges going on regularly
in this lovelorn marketplace.

So why should I feel unique?

Your offering was mass-produced
and sold at bargain prices
to match your inferior quality.

You did not even bother
to meet my low expectations;
instead I was a waste
of your resources.

You never gave me anything
of value;
you only made me feel worthless.

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Option 24: Education as inspiration- Marketing concept of value

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  • Flare the Arcphoenix
    August 12, 2008

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    Ouch for the guy...I could hear the tearing of her heart through this poem, and the song "Cold as Ice," by Foreigner, came to mind almost instantly and it fit the background...to some extent. Maybe that was too farfetched..?

    Anyway, great work. Perfect entwining of the two topics, love and marketing. Your knowledge of the semantics of marketing fit so well into that of a scorned lover, as Allie said.
    However, for lack of a more sophisticated way to say this...THIS IS AWESOME!!!

    Haha. Keep up the awesome work - good luck in the contest!

    --Flare
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  • going nowhere
    July 30, 2008

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    i agree with auburn sunrise... you are the queen of metaphors... what a great piece... same prompt, eh? amazing! using the metaphor that you chose works so well with any type of relationship, but it can't be pulled together so perfectly except by one whose writing skills are priceless.


  • Auburn Sunrise gold member
    July 30, 2008

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    Hahahaha!!! You are the QUEEN of metaphors! This ROCKS!
    Seriously... I am impressed girl. How many marketing classes did you take?

    You know, you're a clever little thing. You knew I was a marketing major, so you knew this would appeal to me and impress me.

    I love the way marketing is used as a metaphor for a relationship - because truly, marketing is a relationship between the seller and the consumer. However, you take it a few steps further and make it an intensely personal relationship.

    The scorned lover is the perfect voice for this sort of poem. I love it!!!

    Great entry!!! Thanks and good luck!!!