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Transparent Eyeball

Rushing water flies into the Sun.
A tree falls safely against his Lover.
I inhale the Forest as I run--
It tastes like Candy during the summer.

As my Fears disappear--
As God could live in trees--
As the Sun is now near--
As I become the Breeze--

Rolling mist scatters across the Sky.
And I ascend safely with my Lover.
I look at small people as I fly--
And everyone looks the same from up here.

Everyone looks the same from up here.

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  • PrabhuDayal Khattar silver member
    November 15, 2008

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    Very thoughtful immagery you worked here and made this sketch very meaningful through the wonderfudsl poetry by you..i love it..well done...


  • the.art.of.drowning
    August 2, 2008

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    that si an excellent poem. freedom. i think its under rated. to be away from the daily hustle. its nice.

    A tree falls safely against his Lover.

    my favourite line. i don't know why. it just really appeals to me. good job!