He said, she said
one day your face won't be a memory
of something left alone
to die in me.
We said, one day
I won't see your face
in the scrap and corner
of every place
we walked or talked,
or smiled even once
Place's I've ignored
for years and months
Maybe someone
who passes by
will see the look
held in my eyes
Maybe those arms
will wrap around
and I'll be too in love
to glance around
and maybe you'd understand
it not what I want,
It's what I had and lost
it's not the paths I'm on,
but the one's I've already crossed
The present is the past,
before we have a chance
to reminisce
all I need
is one small thing
to forget
all I need is one more kiss.
Author notes
I didn't write this to be good, I wrote it to vent. Spare me, I know I rhymed.
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whether you wrote this to be good or not, it turned out brilliant, this has pretty much summed up everything i've been feeling recently.
too many amazing parts to quote.
thanks for entering
♥
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Woah,
this is fucking brilliant babe.
This is one of my favorites by you... I love it.
It just makes sense,
and is so... it's just perfect.
<3 -
i really like the second stanza
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Love It !!!!!! especially...
Maybe someone
who passes by
will see the look
held in my eyes
Maybe those arms
will wrap around
and I'll be too in love
to glance around
I'm in love with the poem! great write <3 Mariah
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the rhyming isn't forced therefore, i like it.
i love most of the stuff you write & this is no different.
one comment :
reminiss --> reminisce
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i love it, because i can see you in my mind reading this at yaya's.
i miss those days.
we'll have them soon.
i promise.
<3
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