Cascading water-
I hear sighs drop
from your shoulders
to the floor.
You are home,
and I take you by surprise.
Caressing water,
between our skins.
The sweat of work washes away
to make room for more.
I have your hips
in my hands, guiding you.
We melt the burden
with our heat.
Soften the pain
with our passion.
Draining water-
Evidence of separation
fades with my touch.
I tangle you with my mouth
and undo you with my hands.
Empty yourself, into me.
Breathing air,
fresh with the scent of us,
drying your body
from my shower of love.
Soaking your need,
with my lips, I take you away.
(Again.)
Author notes
Take out the (Again.)? Yes? No? Enjoy Tyler.. Oh yea, you didn't mention, do you want our usernames or no?
It's kind of more sensual than erotic, but it's not exactly my best subject. Be honest.
A contest entry
- sex by Tangled Angle.
450 points, ended August 1, 2008, 8 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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I didn't mind the "again" - i personally wouldn't have put it there. But as for it being in your poem, I'm kind of neutral towards it. With or without I don't really mind it.
This was sensual for sure, nothing sexual at all in the poem itself. But that is okay, because I really did enjoy this. And sensuality is what provokes the next level...sexuality. Beautifully done.
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Soooo I LOVED this! Eloquently written. You brought depth and passion to the bedroom and made it beautiful. I loved that this was so vivid without saying anything at all. Great work!
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Well, actually I brought it first to the bathroom and then to the bedroom.
I'm so glad you liked this! I think its rather appropriate for my recent return to AP. So how've you been? Written anything stunning lately? I'd love to read it. Send me links.
Love,
Shirley
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