Look at me, can you see,
Will you hear, should you bear,
What I have to say?
Broken deep, deep inside,
A roller-coaster ride.
I can see me, going back now,
Will you pull me, up with strength now?
I am falling deep and deeper,
I need you here, with me now. #
Falling in faster, over my heels,
Nothing can stop me, nothing will yield.
Don’t know how, and I don’t know why,
Will you save me?
Will you save me… this time?
I am here, will you see,
Me here now? Invisible,
Dying here right now.
Shattered now, pieces far,
A porcelain heart tonight.
I can’t see me, anymore now,
Will you find me, in the dark now?
I have fallen, too far, too fast.
Will you stay here, here forever?
Falling in faster, over my heels,
Nothing can stop me, nothing will yield.
Don’t know how, and I don’t know why,
Will you save me?
Will you save me… this time?
I want to be seen…
I want to be found…
I want to be heard!
[Chorus 2x, second time with the bridge overlapping, and end with ‘I want to be heard’ whispered quietly.]
Author notes
Silverstar1993
option 1,5, and 7 (long story for explanation)
A contest entry
- Let The Sun Shine;;Or The Earth Cool, Happiness And Pain;; All The Same Game (The Best Of The Best) by HereComesTheSun.
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Comments
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great poem! i love the way this would flow as a song! but could you please put your option number in your authors note or drop me a message?
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I think that you sent me this in a letter. But if you didn't. Great poem! Good luck in the contests.
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i love this write it flows greatly good job and good write
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are you planning to be a part of the slam?
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yeah, i am
why?
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Very nice, Julia, it's a really good song. Do you have a tune to it or just lyrics? I like the lines:
I want to be seen
I want to be found
I want to be heard!
Everyone has said this at one point or another, but you say it very well in this song. Your song flows.
Nothing can stop me, nothing will yield
Don't know how, and I don't know why
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Welcome To Allpoetry
Hello Silverstar1993
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I really enjoyed this.. you did a wonderful job in expressing a lot of emotions with your words here.. Though it would make a sad song, I think it would be emotionally intense.. Which I like
Thank you very much for sharing this with us here on Allpoetry i'm sure that there are many here who will enjoy this! I hope to read much more from you in the near future...
Keep up the great work!
Jetleena
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