I picked up the warm scones
and lift my head to gaze
through the frosted glass
at a pretty little girl
in her smart red coat
with auburn hair and Ashley eyes
as she pressed her young hands against the glass
at me.
Maybe I should have taken a second glance
through the frost bitten window
at the pretty little girl in red thread scraps
lost beneath the waves of uncombed hair
that half hid her starving eyes
as she pressed her ice blue fingers
against the shivering glass
at the warm food in my hand.
Author notes
Option 1: regular Quotes
"It's not what you look at that matters, it's what you see."
This is very much to do with the prompt and how people do not always see the pain and suffering around us. Maybe if we all took the time to look harder, we would be able to see the people who need us most... and just maybe we will have the heart to help them.
Thankyou for reading.
A contest entry
- Quotes and Big Points!! by she still smiles x.
2000 points, ended August 7, 2008, 28 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
what do you think?
Comments
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brilliant!
all too often, we choose to see what we want what we see to represent... i am there... and i see her... thank you for the second glance...
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Great write! I love it. After reading this piece I feel sad for the girl.
"Maybe I should have taken a second glance
through the frost bitten window
at the pretty little girl in red thread scraps
lost beneath the waves of uncombed hair
that half hid her starving eyes
as she pressed her ice blue fingers
against the shivering glass
at the warm food in my hand."
Unfortunately, not enough people take the time to look hard enough to see the people who need us most.
Keep writing.
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A very moving write that makes the reader stop and think.
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great!
THIS WAS SO NEAT!!! this was by far the best poem i read so far today. that was some unbelievably great stuff. awesome job.
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Bravo
Yes...Bravo i do say. If i could go into depth about how it was good i would..but i lack the critical review part of my brain...plus i have A.D.D and cant focus greatly...but i did read and it was good...bravo again
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Profound and heartbreaking. This poem makes me feel sad for the girl. The imagery is quite vivid and your words make the impact on emotion. Well done and bravo on silver.
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How we look at things reveals our imperfection.
How we see reflects who we are.
A powerful write. It's almost elusive with its power. I'm much impressed.
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and why have I not read this before?!
this was really great! a wonderful write here hun! we should always look closer and hand out what we can live without.. bravo! well deserving of the silver!
Angel
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Whoaaa
This poem is incredibly powerful!!! I loved it!
You so perfectly brought out the meaning of the quote in a very unique way. This captivated and stunned me. Beautiful writing, it brought tears to me eyes..
Thanks for entering && best of luck in the contest!
<3
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A most beguiling penning that left me pondering. You have a real natural talent dear and I urge you to continue to hone such skills.
mj.
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Wow..
This is very powerful. It makes me think....
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powerful juxtaposition
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i really like how you did this...yessums...hehehe..if someone did that to me i'd get scared and then i wonuldnt eat.lol. *huggles*
great write and good luck in the contest
Stephanie ♥
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