Bit by bit, layer by toiled layer,
his hands hammer and crafted
this precious edifice for the one he loved.
How his mind was consumed
to make this castle for his queen,
the angel who claimed a mariner's heart
who once thought the sea his only wife.
With passion to adorn her in a wedded paradise,
he had so many cherished treasures
summoned from the farthest shores.
Exquisite furnishing from Europe's stores,
finest linens, china and more,
all to make their life together
as opulent as the feelings he had
for the one he totally adored.
She would wait at the dock
holding onto him with affection's embrace,
each time a new ship arrived,
eyes bewitched by his gifts
feeling expressed in kisses and smiles.
Always, after each new arrival,
would he place a trail of lilac petals
along the path, because she loved their scent.
Their wedding drew a throng of family and friends,
all following them to the harbor for their honeymoon sail.
No one able to comprehend the shock
over their tragic death during the storm.
The house stood still for several years,
but was never silent,
neighbors seeing the couple in the window
sometimes lit candlestick floating up the stairs at night
plus the sound of his boots walking an her laughter.
Many owners have possessed title to the abode,
all content with sounds that linger
and finding lilac petals on the floor.
But ever aware that dreams at night
will take them to the sea,
on a ship captained by the builder
with his wife at his side,
waking in the morning feeling refreshed,
but remembering the haunting look in their eyes,
while savoring the blend of peace on the waves
with the memory of their eerie ghostly gaze.
A contest entry
- What About This House? by JeannieD Hunter.
1000 points, ended August 6, 2008, 8 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Wonderful!! You capture your reader immediately and hold them with each new line. I really like how you incorporated facts into this wonderful ghost story. Very well done. Thanks so much for entering my contest and good luck!
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Wonderfully penned, I love the imagation that flows so nicely with this!
There is just one thing I seem to be confused on at the end
'on a ship captained by the builder
with his with at his side,'
I can't seem to understand that line with his ... but I'm confused alot so
Love this write
Best of luck mate!
♥
Stay safe
~Manda
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Thank you for the wonderful comment. That line had a typo. thank you so much for noticing.
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Excellent
Wonderful tale on the prompt. You words and imagination brings the house to life in all it's glory. Marvelous piece.
Wish you the best of luck in the contest
Take care
David
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Magnificent!!
Excellent take on the prompt~
Love the lines: eyes bewitched by his gifts
and honeymoon sail
Keep that quill dancing~
Lovely I say
Thank You for sharing Your Talent also Spirit~
Many blessings to You in the contest Sweetness
Best wishes too
and my Love & Light
~ Desire~*~
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