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[ my fingertips are bleeding from ]

my fingertips are bleeding from
picking up many of pieces of what's
been shattered on numerous occasions.

 

you said that you'd protect it so you

put in a jar and silly me i let you shove

it in your pocket.

 

i pretended not to notice the way you

damaged it the first chance you got

 

always telling myself that your words

are jokes [but you're the only one

laughing] i made myself believe that

everytime you said "screw off" you

secretly meant that you loved me

 

my friends don't understand our love/hate

relationship. [remember? i love you but you

hate me] because i was naive i sucked your

deadly toxins down like like milkshakes

 

keep on dreamin' girlfriend is all i seem to hear

almost as if they're forcing me to challenge his

authority. [too many battle scars carefully placed

so no one asks questions] i know i can't he brings

me to my knees with every breath he takes.

 

i vomit every time your finger grazes my skin

[even when i've had enough you still devour

my body and consume my soul everytime you

look my directions] you say i'm pitiful, i whisper

its the way you want me.

 

years float on and yet you still take my by the

hand and lead me to the meadow where you

take all your victims[you're slipping away fading

into your own cell of distress slowly pulling tiny

pieces of me with you] before you go you give

it to me good.

 

i feel the strength of your hands coil around my

neck [my skin fits your fingerprints as if its been

done too many times before] i start to pull away

from my body and my skin turns ice cold. you

hold on tight to make sure your work is done.

 


people with glass hearts shouldn't fall
for people that throw stones

Author notes

bleh i was in the middle of watching t.v...i'm trying to get my muse to get outta her room and do what she did last year!
if its not good i'm sorry but i dont write much lately
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  • SincerelyMegan
    September 11, 2008

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    I loved it.
    -Absolutely loved it.

    Every part of it.
    Wonderful flow, emotion and imagery.

    Good luck on the contest!


  • Mrs. Moretti
    August 30, 2008
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    I really like this. No lie.


  • Isybou
    August 30, 2008
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    ok

    i liked the meaning and it could be a very nice rich poem. all i can say is it needs some rewording. it doesnt quite flow right. it sounds kinda like a story not so much a poem. but like i said t has great poteniial


  • lizwicker
    August 23, 2008

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    people with glass hearts shouldn't fall
    for people that throw stones
    ^^^^^^^^^^^
    ^^^^^^^^^^^
    love it.. great poem and oh so true


  • aanika
    August 12, 2008

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    you said that you'd protect it so you
    put in a jar and silly me i let you shove
    it in your pocket.

    i pretended not to notice the way you
    damaged it the first chance you got

    I like your line breaks,
    they really emphasize the ideas


  • Brit-Girl
    August 10, 2008

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    mm, the first stanza stared out a tad wordy and confuzzling but you picked it up at the end
    thank you for your entry!


  • Hetha gold member
    August 3, 2008

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    People with glass hearts, deserve far better than people who throw stones. Excellent write. Muses aren't to be spanked or flogged, and you can't force them to do your bidding. Your muse did a fine and wonderful job here, and no it didn't suck. I am glad that you entered this piece in my contest. Thank you very much for doing so.


  • Poetic Obscenity
    July 31, 2008

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    because i was naive i sucked your
    deadly toxins down like like milkshakes
    WOW
    That's deep. It's very deep and very angsty to say the least. amazing write indeed.


  • novacaine.
    July 29, 2008

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    i like it. (:
    i really love the "people with glass hearts shouldn't fall for people that throw stones" part.


  • stargazer.
    July 29, 2008

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    This is an Amazing poem you started it and ended it perfectly,I especially loved "people with glass hearts shouldn't fall for people that throw stones".I know how you feel with your muse mine hasn't been doing her job well in a while


    • edit my world.
      July 29, 2008
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      aww thankies ...my muse must be in italy or something...*shakes fist at muse*


  • irdefk
    July 29, 2008

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    *bites you*

    kool.. it could've been a little better but I still like it ^_^. I know about having a love/hate relationship.

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