O' moonlit night,
aura of strength;
Thy beauty so fine,
thy presence intense.
Purify the earth
and cleanse every mind.
Weave your magic among us,
soul to earth bind.
To lie beneath the stars
in the breathtaking awe
of thy beauty, thy strength;
I could want nothing more.
To be washed by the rays
reflected through aeons...
you've lost no majesty
held from times long bygone.
O' moonlit night,
I savour the.
Held close to heart:
your rays, to me.
Heart flutters reminded
of all romance and love.
What delight it is to
know you shimmer above.
Author notes
Uch, lame lame lame.
All the same,
why not let me know how you feel?
Image Credit: Eclipse by ~PhobosKE @ DeviantArt.com
Not used, just beautiful.
Critique.
A contest entry
- Eclipse Contest by SuicidalLover.
300 points, ended August 1, 2008, 10 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
How Do You Like My Soul? --- Critique
Comments
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In the first and forth stanzas the rhyme seems kinda off and somewhat forced, apart from that its beautiful,
and makes ones heart feel all nice *smiles*
love you! all my love,
kittyxxx -
Wow! This was stunning. Enchanting and magical feel to it that was powerful and intense. Beautiful terminology used throughout, this couldnt have been composed better! 'To be washed by the rays
reflected through aeons...
you've lost no majesty
held from times long bygone.' - lovely, pretty...indescribable!
Wonderful work once again, keep it up
~Emily~ xx
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