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Snow balled




Heart beating Mozart,
butterfly strokes in warm uterus.
Lids never bat lashes
in arms pining to hold,
but in
pavilions reigned by Almighty
caressed on angel's wings,
treasured is a snow ball
mummying hurricane of mother's sighs
in torrents of salty crystals.



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It made me think of my first child I lost in womb.

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  • marandah gold member
    October 12

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    Oh my

    Now I understand why you have so many trophies! You are such a talented writer. I look forward to coming back and reading more of your work.


  • SabaSophiya
    March 4

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    This is so poignant and sensitive, I am falling short of words! The imagery you have employed is breathtakingly sharp and beautiful. It stirs the heart!!
    May God bless you always. May you find abundance of happiness and joy in days to come.......!

    Walk in peace,
    Sophie.

    • crimsondew
      March 4
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      Ameen...I am quite flattered by your comment..I always keep trying to pour my feelings in right words ...Thank you..


  • Beautiful-N-Broken gold member
    February 24

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    Oh my goodness. Makes me think of a miscarriage. I've only been through this one time, a few years ago, but I live with it every day & I still cry. Great write!


  • 2lullabyhaven
    November 13, 2008
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    Congrats on your Bronze and on a fine write lol


  • LadyDementia gold member
    October 28, 2008

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    Congrats on the bronze!

    Such sad heart ache for anyone to go throuhg, But this is a beautiful and superbly penned piece, I especially like 'butterfly strokes in warm uterus' and 'torrents of salty crystals' Wonderful phrasing. Congrats on the well deserved bronze


  • Venugopal gold member
    August 11, 2008
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    sorrow expressed in touching manner, poignant feelings


  • crazymomma
    August 1, 2008

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    This was so sad yet hope shined through too. I really enjoyed "heart beating Mozart" and "torrents of salty crystals" in this. So sorry to hear this. Yes your little angel is in heaven and this heavenly write is a beautiful tribute.


  • Sweet Impatience gold member
    July 29, 2008

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    I agree with Passions & jcat on this.. your sweet angel is up in heaven playing. my heart just bleeds for you and aches too. your words moved me in so many ways and on so many levels. my daughter is up there with your baby playing right along side.. I was 24 when I lost her, 3 mnths into the pregnancy.

    kat


  • toomysterious
    July 29, 2008
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    Terribly, terribly sad and haunting.


  • notorious
    July 29, 2008

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    "Heart beating Mozart"
    I like that, it's unique. & yes, it also suits your thoughts about your first child...sorry about that.

    "butterfly strokes in warm uterus."
    Very fitting...& swimmingly.

    "in torrents of salty crystals"
    Sounds like tears to me...

    Good luck


  • jcat gold member
    July 29, 2008

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    This was so sad!!!!! My heart aches for you.....I could not possibly imagine and I won't belittle your feelings by even trying but I can say that this is lovely and I agree with Passion....Your sweet angels are playing in heaven together and reign supreme in HIS embrace...Very well done and best wishes.


  • PassionsPromise gold member
    July 29, 2008

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    I didnt want to go there tonight and I thought the same thing of my little anna i just couldnt. You did a great job here and I wish you the best.

    Love ya
    Passions

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