Your porceline skin use to mesmorize me
Now I see the boils spread and im disgusted
Your eyes use to be this soft shade of blue
A blue so captivating it consumed all of me
But those once beautiful blue eyes turned beamless
The white in them became a dark shade of red
When you smiled I'd see myself in your pearly whites
Now all I see is rotted brown stains on decaying teeth
Where is that beautiful man I once cherished
He died the day I realized it was all just make believe
I only hoped I could see you for what you really were
A monster, with grotesque features and a foul stench
I look at you now and see this souless being
Whose smells like he hasnt bathed in years
The urine, the feces, the unbearable vomitting,
All I can do is stand there in disbelief
Wondering how I once kissed those puss filled lips
How I once gazed into those blood shot dialated eyes
And how I once touched that acne spread you call a face
To think you were one of the most beautiful things to me
Now you truly had become a thing, but not beautiful
You use to have the sweetest taste and the softest touch
Now your foul taste was nothing, but metallic
All that was left to feel now was oily bulging blemishes
Thinking back I can still see the "cold sores" all over your mouth
As you tried to speak to me and the mucus discharged its way out
I heard nothing, but the uglyness of your screeching voice
It sounded so cold and so heinous like nails on a chalk board
I realized I couldnt bare to be around a human garbage can
So I walked away from what was left of the man I use to love
My only thought was damn how could he let himself go
I guess beauty really does fade when your heart is so ugly
Author notes
I actually entered because u had entered one of my contest and i loved u work....by the way its shydreamer3 lol i know this kinda hides our identity on here. but yeah if i dont win its cool i def did try on this, but who knows i hope u like it.
A contest entry
- Nasty by babygirl2582.
450 points, ended August 7, 2008, 10 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Wow I loved this piece. I know exactly what you mean, when someone you love becomes repulsive to you. This poem was very intense. I'm not sure that I really enjoyed reading it as such but it definatly struck me. I think it's very good. Usually I would prefer to see a poem broken up into sstanzas but I think the way in which you have set this piece is interesting. I felt slightly over whelmed by the string of descriptions which I think suits the subject matter. Well done.
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Yes a person outter appearance should never matter in the end because they will not always look the way they did when u first started dating them you take the goood with the bad really. Something tells me this person was a bad person to begin with and karma got the best of him so the inner him shined through the outter him. Very interesting word choices here I loved it. I was laughing, but at the same time I took this poem to be a great write.
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You have an obvious talent....your words and flow in this poem were impecable.....i absolutely loved this poem and my favorite lines in the poem are "
Your porceline skin use to mesmorize me
Now I see the boils spread and im disgusted
Your eyes use to be this soft shade of blue
A blue so captivating it consumed all of me
But those once beautiful blue eyes turned beamless
The white in them became a dark shade of red
When you smiled I'd see myself in your pearly whites
Now all I see is rotted brown stains on decaying teeth
Where is that beautiful man I once cherished
He died the day I realized it was all just make believe
I only hoped I could see you for what you really were
A monster, with grotesque features and a foul stench
I look at you now and see this souless being
Whose smells like he hasnt bathed in years
The urine, the feces, the unbearable vomitting,
All I can do is stand there in disbelief"
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mmmm puss filled lips ... sounds yummy! hehe I like how you make this person seem like some hideous beast. I kind of chuckled a bit!
Nice write!
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