Jack 'n' Jill blew up the hill
with sticks of dynamite.
Mother Goose lit the fuse
and danced throughout the night.
Goose Land blew to smithereens
and everyone died quickly,
except for 'ol King Cole,
who lasted and is sickly.
He had a child by Mary,
the contrary little lass.
She was gone away that day
so she n'er did pass.
Now Mary and her baby
and King Cole rule the land.
Mary wants a younger love
which we can understand.
WAIT! Boy Blue is now appearing
from underneath the hay.
He's going to lure sweet Mary
and blow King Cole away.
Author notes
From Fantasy Dream, member of this group. Aye, I be a pirate!
A contest entry
- Wicked Nursery Rhymes - What Really Happened? by Wilted Rose Bush.
500 points, ended August 11, 2008, 16 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - PIF Fractured Fairy Tales by Antipodi.
1200 points, ended February 4, 14 entries
Honorable mention
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Hmmm... Boy Blue is certainly making the rounds. Poor King Cole, seems he's ganged up on. But mary must have her way '
This is a cute mixed up nursery rhyme and I wosh you good luck in the contest
Dee
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Jack and Jill were naughty persons and you wrote a wonderful collage of broken rhyme me piratin person ..good luck in the contest
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This is very nicely written. And it contains more than just Jack 'n' Jill which really gives the touch of how all the nursery rhymes are somehow linked. The rhyming was good, the poem flowed and it was a very good write.
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Haha, i love this one. I like your little animated icons at the end. It gives the poem a touch. This was an amazing write, very creative and ironic.
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Bravo well done
I loved it. Idon't know what to say and that's a complement. Thanks and good luck. Boog
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a good poem penned, that little boy blue gets everywhere, what a deviant he is, he needs shooting lol
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Nice job. This is a quick and interesting read. It is thoroughly enjoyable from start to finish. Nice incorporation of mutilple nursery rhymes.
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HAHA this is freaking orsm, nothing more need be said
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