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[ silver scales ]

silver scales
penetrate darkness
dragonfly caves

A contest entry

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  • cheaphotelsign
    August 4, 2008

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    i like 'dragonfly caves'....i wouldn't expect anything less as far as imagery...you bring home the bacon with so few words....and you make it sizzle..and that is hot.....breakfast? lol


  • sailor ptolema
    August 3, 2008

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    ooo cool I love this rather dark haiku.
    I have a suggestion for L3

    maybe just

    'a dragonfly'.....what do you think. I think the addition of an indefinite article with make it more succinct.
    But, I really liked this.

    thanks for entering and g'luck.

    -sailor ptolema


    • sheltered
      August 4, 2008
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      the fish ate the dragonfly


      • sailor ptolema
        August 4, 2008
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        ohhhhhhh lol. Well, I'm sorry that I didn't understand the 'cave' part...after reading and commenting on 50 entries...my cognition started to fizz lol

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