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A Voice from Within the Box

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Within this box a dirty man lays,
within his own mind he always plays.
Voices heard within his head,
"Hello poet" your not dead.

Here is a rhyme or maybe two,
that will surely pen you through.
Oh dear what is the matter
who is making all that clatter?

Now sir you must pay attention
or did I simply fail to mention.
That within your hard working mind,
is a treasure you will greatly find.

Words galore now dance alive
and perfection is what we strive.
So bring it together from your ol' box,
you can do it you gray headed fox.

Within a moment a sonnet is made
and the days sorrow will simply fade.
Think out of the box and you will see
you have created perfect poetry.

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  • thejollytinker
    August 12, 2008
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    I like it, but I'm holding out. Sweet dreams.


  • cricketjeff gold member
    August 10, 2008

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    Great stuff all of your poetry is a delight to read, and this is especially so. Thanks so much for entering I enjoyed the whole contest and I'm sorry it has taken so long for me to get round to the comments.


  • Volfeng
    August 1, 2008

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    Hey, congrats on the shiney, my love. very nicely penned! I love you!


  • Griswold
    July 29, 2008

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    Beautifully done sweetheart, thats thinking outside the box for sure. Good rhyme and meter baby. Love you...Scott


  • poeticweaver gold member
    July 28, 2008

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    Excellent As Always Victorious!

    Bravo, and all the best within the contest!

    Much love, Timothy


  • Volfeng
    July 28, 2008
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    Kewl, Babe. very nicely penned liked it, has a twist too,, good luck in the contest, I love ya,


  • Swangrnv gold member
    July 28, 2008
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    hey!

    This is cool! think outside the box! yeah, I sure can identify with that. great write my friend!


  • TwiztidMaggot
    July 28, 2008

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    hehe. I liked this peice! You did an amazing job writing this. keep up your amazing work!!!! Best of luck in the contest!

    CrimsonViper


  • Freed by Mercy silver member
    July 28, 2008

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    "Words galore now dance alive"

    Always do in your poems, my dear. Words come to life.
    I enjoyed this poem, hon.


  • Clovis...Curious silver member
    July 28, 2008

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    Superb

    Ah, 'tis a fine write, indeed. Imagery, rhythm and rhyme are just fine. It always pays to think "outside of the box". This poem reminds me of one I wrote called
    "In The Box". Here's a link to it:
    http://allpoetry.com/poem/2200075

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