The fallen fruit is not as sweet
as the apple still hung on the tree
to pluck the knowledge forbidden us
is to learn the meaning of living free
Burn
I will set you to burn
and you'll worship the flame
as I lay you down in the earth
Cry
as you're painting the sky
fallen down getting high
burn the oil of soul's rebirth
The garden gates have been closed
cherubim standing watch on the door
each gatekeeper that waits outside
has more strength than the one before
The castle walls that we've built
hem us in and keep the world at bay
Sisyphus rolls the stone of life
Prometheus chose to light the way
In the temple they mend the veil
that was rent when the angel died
all the towers have fallen in on us
the foundation is set in foolish pride
Burn
I will set you to burn
and you'll worship the flame
as I lay you down in the earth
Fall
all who beckon the call
will they reckon my name
finding out what a soul is worth
A contest entry
- Make It Dark by peregrin.
450 points, ended August 10, 2008, 81 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - BRING IN THE DARKNESS by lovingpoet.
745 points, ended April 5, 34 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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now that I got some points thaought you would love some and good luck
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good write very nice done thank you for entering
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Very deep message, I like the flow and the concept.
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This is fab! I love the bibilical and mythological feel to it! Deep message in there also!
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Very nice. Very insightful. I like it alot. The mythological references were well chosen.
Great job.
Mike
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Yesssss. I LOVED this. This is my favorite work on this site by far. Congratulations on an amazing write. Keep it up.
Tal.
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Excellent
Nicely done...a perfectly painted picture made with perfectly arranged words.
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Holy crap...
This is amazing...epic...strong and authorative.
I am very impressed by this one my friend.
So much within this write...breathtaking...
wolf
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What is a soul worth? AS we worship the flames, when all other faith has died! The apple from the forbidden tree, first sin and man's own destructive side to sin! Great penning!! ~Sie
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Thanks, and nice to hear from you again. Habe you been writing?
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