Sitting here in my drug induced reflection
I remember my heartless emotional dissection
You ripped out my heart and threw it away
So many things I just never could say
I loved you with all my heart
But my world, you just tore apart
I was a pawn in your sick fucking game
As the blood spills I scream your name
How could you hurt me so badly
All the times you told me you loved me
Sadly I believed all your cold lies
As the rage builds up inside
The scars were never more defined
But tonight I'll leave it all behind
Forget about all the bullshit
As I drown myself in these orange bottles
I pick up the phone just to call you
Slam it back down screaming "fuck you"
So many nights I cried alone
Wishing you would just go home
You say you tried to help me
Well now I'm gonna help you
There's nowhere else to hide
Now you'll pay with my suicide
As I stumble into my darkened room
I quickly cock the hammer back
Boom
Author notes
This one's about my ex-girlfriend and all the pain she caused me. This is true, raw hate.
A contest entry
- Come on Lovely Poets! Let Your Hatred Come Out With Cruel Passion by Leaving Today.
465 points, ended August 19, 2008, 19 entries
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Whoah emotion busting through the seams. I love the use of fuck( a most amazing words that is so underrated) bringing in such raw but eloquent emotion. However many of the lines and words are lacking beauty to justify yout passion. In combination it would result in a truly stunning piece.=)
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feeling the "nothing left to lose" all around
your words drug induced or not once you're at the bottom
look for faith, free the little bird. given enough times
and better words you will be found.
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Very nice poem. enjoyed reading
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Well you can certainly feel the emotion in this piece and for good reason!
"Sitting here in my drug induced reflection
I remember my heartless emotional dissection"
I absolutely love those lines! Although I don't usually like "suicide" poems, this one is not terribly cliche, so kudo's to that!!
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Humm..very hard to acccept and very painful to feel..very touching piece my friend..I am fully touched with it...
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holy hell !
Wow I had to reread this like several times to make sure I wasn't going crazy, I could have sworn to god it was something that I wrote a while ago that had been lost or something like that its amazing that you can find things that speak out and reach the way your feeling so precise and exact. This is very very well written in my opinion I love the dark angry frustrated feel of it and the raw emotion....perhaps because I can relate with it so well it is very similar to the way I feel about somebody but sadly due to many things its not my x but a struggle I'm still involved with .... strange enough it applies to my x even more...wow perhaps I have problems when it comes to picking out healthy relationships lol. Anyways this was a brillant poem and I really enjoyed it I plan to add it to my favorites and read more of your work. Keep up the great writing man, you totally killed this shit =) -ry
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