Bitter.
Sometimes winter doesn't bite
quite as hard as we would like
so biting back seems pointless.
Counter case
Staking claims to false reality
As if our bonds at stake.
A pitiful woman strapped in pretty dresses
Confesses in darkness to imperfections
Addressed only under holiest of circumstances.
Mid-morning never tasted so dirty
Drowning in mold encrusted bedsheets,
Eyes surrendering to hallucinogenic sunlight
We're normal, pointing out fault.
Strewn across a universe
In a galaxy so close to home
Sits a man who holds boxes
Filled with tears cried by teenaged mothers,
and secret lives of Pandora.
Shame never came in such pretty shades of denial,
I'd like to save your soul but
timing isn't right.
Author notes
Bless conjections.
A contest entry
- Reverse Word Bank by Loki.
1500 points, ended August 3, 2008, 10 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
From The Vault To Your Eye Sockets
Comments
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Congratulations on the well-deserved bronze award!
Well Done!
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Nice write, good luck.
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Well done
This is audible and the attitudes clear. Good luck in the contest.
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"biting back seems pointless.
Mid-morning never tasted so dirty
Eyes surrendering to hallucinogenic sunlight
Strewn across a universe
In a galaxy so close to home
Shame never came in such pretty shades of denial,
I'd like to save your soul but
timing isn't right."
Jeezus.
This is rad. I really tried to come up with only a couple but....I had a little trouble & hated to leave anything out. So, the ones above are my top five in no particular order.
You are just mad crazy good.
Whew!
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Bloody Brilliant
This is absolutley gorgeous. I love this. It's got an absolutley amazing flow sweetie. ...the rhythem..the rhyme..BEAUTIFUL
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loved the first stanza.
"Eyes surrendering to hallucinogenic sunlight"
and that.
only critical "as if our bonds at stake"
did you mean for a were?
wunnerful
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