for a man
that I had traveled
miles to see
"Hi Charlie
I was here and you were gone,
now you are here and I am gone.
Read and weep and wipe!"
toilet tissue
was my choice
of paper
I left a note
for a man
that I had traveled
miles to see
"Hi Charlie
I was here and you were gone,
now you are here and I am gone.
Read and weep and wipe!"
toilet tissue
was my choice
of paper
for a man
that I had traveled
miles to see
"Hi Charlie
I was here and you were gone,
now you are here and I am gone.
Read and weep and wipe!"
toilet tissue
was my choice
of paper
Author notes
"I bet you write little poems too." - c. bukowski
My photograph
A contest entry
- buk & thee by onerios13.
1300 points, ended August 11, 2008, 14 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Well written my friend,A wonderful piece that I truly enjoyed...Good luck with this one...mal
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Short, sassy and unbelieveably sweet. This had a wonderful poignancy that held not only buk's voice but something beyond mere nostalgia.
An excellent entry.
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This was great
Yes imagination often brings light to the world about us
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cute i like this.... hello its nice to mmeet you im being random and thought id read you... great job here... good luck in the contest........!
i like meeting new people.... hope its ok..! -
lol...this is absolutely delightful! I think this contest is bringing out the best poetry! Love, Lane
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Yes!
Well done. I think you captured the spirit of things very well.
Good luck in the contest.
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this made me smile it is a sweet poem and i think you were clever to write this and that title! wonderful!
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clever
Interesting approach. Liked the idea and compact writing. Always more challenging to write short!
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just make sure when you're leaving your "note" that the train is not "passing" by - passengers may get more than they bargained for...
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What a fitting comment, Charlie was known to moon folks at times, I mooned him once from beside the tracks, I guess I was as crass as he was.
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a good piece of poetry which flows smoothly along, i dislike bukoski but i agree witgh him with we all writeel small poems too
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well, Hank would love this.
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I just finished reading a large selection of his poems and I can see myself as one of the ladies tapping on his door.
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