Pale.
Pallid.
Plastic.
Eyes dull from weight I can't see.
(Wouldn't matter either way,
I still have an arsenal of abuse to use)
And your token innocence
while adorable to the rest of the world-
hurts me to look at-
( I have to destroy you)
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Finding
death
elusive.
Assault the intricacies with Blatant accusations,
steal vivid breath from petal lips
only stopping when...
I am just a flat line..
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Brazen acts of riveted silence
captivate my mind.
Alleviate faceted pain with
Mercurial achievements.
Actualize and Measure the weight
of my insanity by the speed of the collision
when I met my end.
Oblivion will seep through my eyelids-
but I'll be long gone by then.
Author notes
Poem One:
http://allpoetry.com/poem/4174671
Your poem for inspiration.
Poem Two:
Option Eight: *I am just a flat line.
Poem Three:
Option Thirty Two:
A suicide note left in a car.
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The way the title works is taking each parenthical mark in order.
and Kill in the middle.
So (I) kill (you)
and (You) Kill (me)
with the final poem being (I) Kill (Everything)
The word bank option is worked into the whole thing. I think I used nine or ten... maybe more.
A contest entry
- FIVE YEAR AP ANNIVERSARY BASH!!!! by Auburn Sunrise.
5000 points, ended August 15, 2008, 39 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Be harsh, be specific.
Comments
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Impressive. Intriguing. This is just... overwhelming and stunning.
I can't believe you managed to write from three separate options, using the word bank in all of them... quite complex and brilliant.
I especially loved the ending:
"Actualize and Measure the weight
of my insanity by the speed of the collision
when I met my end.
Oblivion will seep through my eyelids
but I'll be long gone by then."
I can't verbalize how amazing that was to read. It reminds me of something I read in the book "Night Falls Fast: Understanding Suicide" by Kay Redfield Jamison - where she says that emergency responders guage the seriousness of suicide attempts by the method chosen, specifically how quickly the person would have died, how difficult it would have been to revive them, and how easy it would have been for someone to find them.
Quicker, more final methods, such as gunshots, are seen as more serious than taking pills and other slower methods.
My suicide attempts:
1) overdose on pain pills
2) gun to head (but didn't go through with it)
3) slit wrists
So, I suppose they would say that I wasn't all that bent on dying. Does that make me less insane?
Great entry!!! Thank you and good luck.
By the way, the poem of mine that you chose as inspiration for the first poem in your trio, is one of my favorites.
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