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[disqualified]

My life.
    Memorable slivers
      turned rotten in grape
                aftertaste.
      Too much drama for one queen
and droppings of eyes littered frictionless
            across many
                notes [high on emotion].
    Sudden insurrection of time - flow flow
                jerk stop -

  Suddenly here thinking about stupid stasis
                    grace periods
                        erased
              futures disgraced
    already. Just follow
                my voice
    and dip into next week

we can be like
        this forever,
  right?

          And then something striking me beautiful repeated brought back
              from a solace chamber mental;
          summer can only be
          nuclear
                              once.

Author notes

Tip of the hat to Bean for an awesome phrase.
Cool contest - wish I'd thought of it first.
This isn't very good, today is bad.

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Comments

  • restful.soul
    July 29, 2008

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    you used AND!!!!! (quick they might not notice ) man im never gonna beat youuu


  • Bean Sidhe silver member
    July 28, 2008

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    "turned rotten in grape
    aftertaste."

    "stupid stasis
    grace periods"

    And taking a page out of the ridiculously good endings:

    "And then something striking me beautiful repeated brought back
    from a solace chamber mental;
    summer can only be
    nuclear
    once."

    And a requisite tip of the hat to Loki for the nuclear idea...Thank you, dearest.

    BTW, the four of us are

    simply

    rad

    together.



  • Loki silver member
    July 28, 2008
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    Aight, maybe you aren't, yet.

    lol