Time slips away
Soon and gone today
Tries holding on
Just feels alone
With no one there
Nothing to share
All hope feels lost,
And she pays a cost
Her life is the pirce,
And she lays it down
To cast it away
To burn the hate today
She wants to let go,
And never show
How much pain she hides
How many things she has to decide?
And no one ever says
"Are you okay?"
Because no one can help me
Not today
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This makes me think of how simple of an existance it would be to be a cloud.
Just drifting, amorphously content through the sky as the wind carries me along without care, and when the time comes, I just dissipate into infinity, unaware of ever existing.
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Echoes what many feel
at times in their life, but so sad when through despair no HOPE can be seen. I think you've written this so well,
And no one ever says "are you ok" is so true and is my favourite line. Don't vanish too often! -
beautifully sad...loved it
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beautifully sad...loved it
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*applauds* Never let go....keep writing
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The sadness of this struck a chord with me
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Wonderful poem!! I really enjoyed this. Flowed great. I feel like I can completely relate to this.
"She wants to let go,
And never show
How much pain she hides
How many things she has to decide?"
My favorite stanza. So true. Great write!
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b-e-a-u-t-i-f-u-l
I love this, it's
amazing
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wow. wow. wow. when you know im speechless..that's something.
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*CLAP*
The loniness in this poem just jumps out and grabs you.. well done, great read. You really nailed the ending:
And no one ever says
"Are you okay?"
Because no one can help me
Not today
This is just a strong ending that it really makes it a really nice write. well done.
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Wow i loved this p03m alot It was very well written and so describeing. My favorite part was when you said "Her life is the pirce,
And she lays it down
To cast it away
To burn the hate today" That part was very good. Lovers it.
..<3..
Shelly
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