The world is a large zoo, with all types of creatures
And every creature is unique, with no similarities
Every being has their tone of speaking, their accent,
Although we all speak English, but how many of us
Actually understand what the other one is speaking.
And everything is coiled up, with ups and down
Some of the creatures even have morals,
Don’t we actually fear ourselves? Isn’t the man
The next door, a threat to you, or is it a snake?
To help ourselves we make chains to bound selves
There is no trust, one can’t be sure if they give birth to
A human or something else, like she told me-
She is a vegetarian, and she fed on my heart…
Of course, there is more hunger of love
Than for bread, but one needs to make sure
But you know, it’s not necessary to eat love
Off flesh of a lamb, you can fetch it other ways,
The way a vegetarian farmer would do.
A contest entry
- Quote Inspired. [Albert Einstein] by Naridill.
300 points, ended August 7, 2008, 4 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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nice take on the prompt . . liked "there is more hunger of love Than for bread" . . congrats on the trophy
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The start was slow, but I adored the pick up and use of opinion and fact between the lines.
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I think you mean 'accent' instead of 'ascent' in the second stanza? If so, that is the only thing that I have found to critique about this poem
I love the take on the prompt and also the way that this poem has such a beautiful message on its own I wish you all the best in the contest!
Keep writing
Polly
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LOL you pointed one or another mistake in all the three writes I wrote yesterday... I think it is better to have a revision once I am over with my write... and thanks once again..!!
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