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The Transition


The transition between the times

There are many roadways and portholes
Where they hide like earthquakes and then
Suddenly will abrupt & rock or shake the world

With each breath you take, and voice you hear
One fell deeper into a trance, deeper and deeper
And one day so deep, in such a darkness
That they fell into the days of future…

Tomorrow is a trance, it is street hypnotism

As I can see, the way God’s playing his dice
Although she was not a fortune teller
But now I can feel the weight of her words

Earlier it was speech, now as I see the movie
I think she told it much before, but, I hope

Through these portholes, I will drag her into me,
One day she’ll feel that probably we could make
Good script writers, and,

Tomorrow would no longer be a secret
If we get one, we know what’s tomorrow,
And that is the only way
To get out of the trance, trance of time…

Author notes

Quite clearly it is the second quotation...

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  • Reptile Lady gold member
    August 4, 2008

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    A creative piece.
    Love the stanza
    Through these portholes, I will drag her into me,
    One day she’ll feel that probably we could make
    Good script writers, and,

    Thank you for your entry and best wishes
    Julie


  • Polaja Greeters member
    July 29, 2008

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    This is an interesting poem, and I enjoyed the read I was wondering whether you meant to have 'portholes' at the beginning and 'potholes' at the end, or were they meant to be the same - just seemed like it would fit to me I really like the wistful feeling of this poem - I wish you the very best in the contest!

    Keep writing

    Polly

    • The Pole Star
      July 29, 2008
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      Thanks for pointing that out... and yes they were meant to be same...LOL that single letter changes the entire meaning...LOL... and thanks once again..!!


  • maralisa silver member
    July 28, 2008

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    wow a wonderful take on the promt very deep and powerful
    Where they hide like earthquakes and then
    Suddenly will abrupt & rock or shake the world good luck in the contest

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