It comes in my dream
my window shows me
white clouds like pigeoni cant see the green
but i feel the peace
life meets the truth
- - of false kiss
Author notes
I have written what i feel
A contest entry
- 10/30/30 Semi Quickie by Sweet Impatience.
1200 points, ended July 31, 2008, 10 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
I aprreciate if you make a comment/applause
Comments
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a good poem thiough i have no clue why you sent me that instant message then, perhaps you sent it to me by mistake?
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i really like your name and its not by mistake
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The emotion in this piece is touching. Considering the amount of words used, you have penned an excellent poem with nice flow and rhythm.
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Really nice piece that has so little words to say so much. You are very good at describing your feelings without having to ramble on endlessly. I wish i could get things across in such a simple manner. well done. i know it's one of your older writes but never the less still worth the read.
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Great write and the picture of the border helps the poem greatly
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What a great poem
yes the trophy is well achieved and i wish that this trophy would be gold
i like from the beginning to the end
specially the last 2 sentences
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ohh forgot to give the applaud
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When did you write this one?
yeah a real great short poem
i told you that all of your poems are great and now i must add that they are very unique too
keep writing
your friend
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Great job outstanding Keep writing.
Oh and thank you for reading my poem
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Short and amazing!! Wow the picture is amazing!!! I loved it sooo much..
Silvertrophy well deserved
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Short and sweet but full of imagery to fuel my imagination. I close my eyes, thinking of your very beautiful words and hoping, one day, peace will exist.
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wow wow wow!
these simple words were stunning! the imagery here was amazing! keep penning!
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nice words friend! Be Happy
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"but i feel the peace
life meets the truth
- - of false kiss"
I absolutely love that line. Great write and congratulations on the trophy!
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Very well deserved siver...such an emotional and touching write!
Love~
Mom
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LOVED IT!!!!!!!
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Beautiful and captivating piece you have created
Feelings are felt
Love the poem
Best wishes
Julie
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Ah..what a soft image you poured showing the heart of yours and its status..tender and heartfelt work dear..wonderful indeed...and thanks for sharing it..also commenting on my work..God bless...
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A most beautiful yet sad write Rehan, your friend Josie Sorry I haven't been on but I am sick with the flu and rising diabetes levels again
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i'm sorry you feel this way. if there was something that i could do to help you feel much better than you know that i am here. i am sorry for all sadness you feel.
a very haunted write!
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This is a Fantastic poem that you have penned here. your take on the prompt is different, I enjoyed reading it.
"life meets the truth" Outstanding line that you have. I absolutely love this line, so full of the truth. Superb.
good luck
kat
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I think this was a wonderful expression of your feelings. It was different, I have deffinately never read one quite like it. You have a style completely your own. I enjoyed reading it, I hope to read more soon. TTYL8R! Evie
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beautiful job here i love the length!
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SWEET
THIS IS ONE OF YOUR BEST POME THAT MADE ME CRY KEEP IT GOING BABY AND HOLD IT TIGHT -
nice job
I really like this poem and the picture really suits it well good job buddy
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i love it
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i likezz it =]
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Beautiful as always
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Lovely brother. I enjoyed it, and its a beautiful piece
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keep rockin it dude!
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i can feel the depth you are trying to express here, maybe im missing something, im not really gathering a flow from this peom, i like the last lines of the truth of (a) false kiss,keep up the writing, ~your sis Amy
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thats peaceful lol i liked it keep it up! i wish i could applaud it but i dont have a paid account
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great/no\no/no
it is greatest ever
wow i love this poem, i really like the way you have made this poem. really greatest
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Wow I liked this alot. Short but yet you made a point. Some detail in it. Very good. I lovers it.
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Peace is an amazing feeling one rarely feels! Great work, buddy!
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I loved the fact that peace came in the dream...yet she seems to remember it while she is awake... But all in all I Like it a lot... great job
always~Steph
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Love the thought ful sentiment of peace within a dream being translated to a waking state, there are a few things poetically I would do different but this is great.
I have sent you things I would change seperately .
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wow fantastic , Life meets the truth--of false kiss
Loved it great work again keep it up -
a beautiful poem with some great true feelings
i feel the peace life meets the truth of false kiss peaceis great for the growing soul love the border to a fantastic poem my friend
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