Blood streaked trenches in the cement wall
Chips of finger nails stain where she began to claw
She could scale the walls and yet there was no escape
A frail pale motionless figure upon the floor,draped.
Her clothing worn,torn and tattered
Where Earths natural maggoty decay
Began to where at her.
Her body so horribly contorted, she looked slain.
She had screamed and pleaded
As her attacker smirked
She shrieked the way he needed
He derived pleasure from her hurt.
Whoever could guess, this would take place
Once he had taken her hand.
He'd saved her from the tower
Now, he had power over her land.
Oh Sleeping Beauty.
You had dreamt with such grace.
Now he's desecrated this sacred space.
She's left lifeless upon the stone ground
No longer will we hear that gentle sound.
Her beating heart, that sweet and intriguing pound.
If only she had seen
He was the Prince of Misery.
She'd still be sleeping
Dreaming
Oh Sleeping Beauty.
Author notes
Just came to mind really..
Contest 2
Option #6 Picture Prompt (the picture above is the prompt (put credit to "the Innocence" by littlemewhatever at DeviantArt)
"No animals were harmed during the writing of this poem"
A contest entry
- PRE-WRITTEN POEMS ONLY!! GIVE ME YOUR BEST! by xXxIceQueenxXx.
800 points, ended July 31, 2008, 56 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Life is about Options by Darkwell.
1050 points, ended September 1, 2008, 25 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
=] What do ya think?
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Awsome, Amazaing imagery
Great use of rhyme
'Began to where at her.
Her body so horribly contorted, she looked slain.' (Wrong Where here)
But great poem overall. Please, keep writing!
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..WOW...
I must first compliment the wicked use of imagery. It accented the drama, tone, emotion, and intense passion that was devouring the reader as they read. It's a classic example of a beautiful love, that is beautiful in it's own sickness. I LOVED it. You've got a talent to be admired. Enthralling for sure. Brava on a brilliant write.
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oh WOW i love this one its so visual and dark fairytale
the way you make her saviour her killer was just chillyfying and the flow is beautiful too
If only she had seen
He was the Prince of Misery.
She'd still be sleeping
Dreaming
Oh Sleeping Beauty.
i *love how it ends
WTG good luck in the contest
one thing
Began to where at her. should be wear?
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Glad you enjoyed it sweetie.hehehe.
Ooo, thank you. I've got to fix that. Thaaaank you again.
Love ya.
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Loving this...
Great twist on the Grimm...
Again, great descriptive narrative, rhythm & flow had me captivated throughout in this well penned, intense & compelling read...
Well done!!!
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Thank you again. To tell you the truth i took "The Claiming of Sleeping Beauty" As inspiration. (Ann Rice novel under her erotic ser -name) Only in the fact that i wanted a truly twisted faerie tale. Though i went more on the abusive horror instead of her amazing S&M scenario.
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ooh i gotta check that out
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Hahaha.
You so totally got to!!
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When I read the first liens I was reminded of the Texas Chainsaw Massacre movie oddly enough, when they find the fingernails scratched into the walls.
Then, as I read on I was sort of reminded of "Jack the Ripper" for another odd reason.
Upon continuing when I read "He'd saved her from the tower" I was reminded of Shrek.
Very weird to go from two dark, gruesome events to that, but oh well! i do like this poem though. It has a very dark mood with the essence of a beautiful fairy tale.
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Texas Chainsaw Massacre, Jack the Ripper, and Shrek.. AMAZING...Now that i look back, i suppose i do see those things.lol. Thanks.
Thank you for your great comment and i'm glad you liked it.
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wows this is amazing huni, i really do love this,
i think you mean ware or wear instead of where though
but apart from that i cant point out anything,
i love this and the imagery in it is fantastic,
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WOW?
I love, wow. hehe. Makes me feel good.
I probably did, i must fix it. thank you.
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Wow Amazing write its so very good. Wish i could write likers this. Great job i lovers it. {huggles}
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huggles.
Thank you dearie. I was really hyper randomly last night. I was up until 6:30 this morning, and i just couldn't stop writing. This is what came of it. hehe. -
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huggles :]
Welcomes :]
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