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Little Poems

Yes, actually, I do
write little poems

on little napkins
while I spend short
minutes

flirting with married
men, and confessing
to the bartender

my many
teeny tiny sins

 

it's so much fun

to watch his face.


I write little poems
for all the same
reasons

you never did

 

because sometimes
the things I
feel compelled to say

just aren’t worth
the paper
they are written on

gotta light?

Author notes

Prompt: "I bet you write little poems too." - c. bukowski

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  • ArtFullyMe gold member
    August 11, 2008

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    This has a cutting edge to it, cynical, needy, and raw..
    the flirting with married men adds a specific touch to it.. gives it that little extra wrong right in the face..

    Buk was such a complicated mystery..
    I wonder.. do you think he got off on manipulating people?

    congrats

  • Rowan gold member
    August 11, 2008
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    oh, this is good...
    loved this.


  • Malabu
    August 11, 2008
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    damn lane...
    sigh
    wait
    i got a light
    marry me
    mal

    lol


    • Dalaney gold member
      August 11, 2008
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      lol...keep the light burning, darlin' Love, Lane


  • onerios13
    August 11, 2008

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    I write little poems
    for all the same
    reasons

    you never did

    WHOOT! But this was fun as shit to read and an extraordinary example of a woman's take on that old coot of a buk! lol Loved this to pieces, from the wry humor to the more serious, yet perfectly understated expression of sadness and regret.

    Marvelous stuff.


  • Erik Ambrose gold member
    August 6, 2008
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    I still adore and admire you.


  • Cat gold member
    August 5, 2008
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    -


  • Sesheta
    July 31, 2008

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    This poem is real and has soul. It captures the essence of little poems and the things you say...beautiful and deeper than they seem.


  • Amera gold member
    July 31, 2008

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    Your "little poems" fill volumes as I stop to read between the lines. This "little poem" is no exception.

    Lmera♥

    • Dalaney gold member
      August 2, 2008

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      God, I love your comments and I ADORE that avatar!!lol It is soooo you! I have a few of my own comments coming your way, lil' sis

      Love, Lane


  • arafura gold member
    July 30, 2008

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    Your poems are never "little" poems, even if written on paper napkins or as grafitti on the wall. They will still have that touch of class! Excellent!

  • silverfish
    July 30, 2008

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    a little poem with some tiny weeny existentialism. -well-lightedfish


  • Beating gold member
    July 30, 2008

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    Hehe! This really made me smile! I too write these little poems on notes on napkins or whatever, just as a reminder to myself, if I want to use it later, or leave it as it is. Problem is when those notes are lost! haha! I remember having written something great - but I can't find the napkin it was on. Damn!

    • Dalaney gold member
      July 30, 2008
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      ...lol...i've done that, too...how many poems i've tossed into the bin, or wiped my messy mouth with! thanks for reading. love, lane

  • Malabu
    July 30, 2008

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    lol...just love this...I too write little poems...love little poems...they are moments seemingly to be a spur of pleasantries or daunting in absent of words...pause then write...
    your next line...you can flirt with me anytime

    i've got a light! for your fire
    LOL
    Mal


  • AutumnGypsy gold member
    July 29, 2008

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    Fabulous, this had such a perfect rhythm to it, I could picture the scene perfectly. Maybe we all write little poems without realising.


  • ravensgift
    July 29, 2008
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    Yes, I do write little poems too.... loved this


    • Dalaney gold member
      July 30, 2008
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      ...then i am in good company thank you so much for reading love, lane


  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    July 29, 2008

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    Cute Lane! Meh, a bit of flirting is harmles


  • JohnnyD gold member
    July 28, 2008

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    Hmmnnnnnnn, to write down all my "Teeny- and not so Teeny-Tiny sins" Would require a roll of butcher paper perhaps 300 feet long...

    for the first chapter....that is

    are mine worth writing down?

    Not a chance, unfortunately.

    (fun write gal, nice )



    Len


  • just rob gold member
    July 28, 2008
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    I knew I would Find you here.

    You did him proud.


  • forty-one
    July 28, 2008

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    Oh for goodness sake... will you write just one bad poem so I don't have to sound biased every time I comment on your magnificent work Just one teeny tiny flaw please. Ok, nevermind... can't really win the contest if you do that.


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  • malmadre gold member
    July 28, 2008

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    Very nice! finding a quiet bar to ponder life before happy hour starts, atmosphere is key...


    • Dalaney gold member
      July 30, 2008
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      lol...it sure is. Thank you for reading, Mal... Love, Lane


  • KayJay
    July 28, 2008

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    Wonderful (and honest LOL) write... Little slices of life deserve little poems with big meaning... Well done! *blink* *smile* *flirt*
    Ken


  • tara wilson gold member
    July 28, 2008
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  • Suzanne Dia
    July 28, 2008

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    I wrote a poem on a gum wrapper once.
    I love the confessing of sins
    and the matter of fact tone.



    You did him justice.


  • Thomas Scott gold member
    July 28, 2008

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    Boffo!

    Eventually, we write about writing about. And then we will write about writing about writing about.

    It's a slippery slope you are on, woman, but the poem is worth it. Always.


  • cricketjeff gold member
    July 28, 2008

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    I knew you would be in this one of course, and with a masterpiece, it's nice to be right !!!


  • sailor ptolema
    July 28, 2008

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    ah ! This is such a great write . This was a great poem for the prompt, my little poems are scattered throughout my anthropology notes...it's always surprising to find them when I go back to read my notes to study

    -Meg


  • IronMaiden1236
    July 28, 2008
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    LMAO!! You cheeky little flirt!!


  • Mairi bheag gold member
    July 27, 2008
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    You did him justice. This is you, not him, but he would have heard you.


  • tomisb
    July 27, 2008

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    Most of what I have is so much smoke, the rest is mirrors and a left over toke. Be careful with the light so much is combustible and we are all easily burned.

    Tom B.


  • Cup-a-Joe
    July 27, 2008
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    Yes I do

    I couldn't write a long poem if I had to.
    Joe


  • Cannonsfire
    July 27, 2008

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    C

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